Epiphany

Epiphany

A Poem by Doodley
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Sudden realisation.

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With timid strength he opened lids to squint in radiant light,
As shadows danced in a blackened trance across his field of sight;

A minute's tick became an hours tock as he strived to clear his gaze,
And then upon that midday clear he saw to his amaze;

The beauteous canvas that is Life that bowed before his feet,
Of flowers bloomed by natures groom, with scents forever sweet;

Of gentle winds that kissed his cheeks as they whistled their solitary tune,
Of birdsong high that pierced the sky from Nightingale or Loon;

As he stood alone in the warmth of beams and drew crisp air deeply in,
His clouded mind unravelled its haze to reveal his cardinal sin;

That the crystal glass he clutched so tight against his shaking hips,
Of hemlock strong, was now all gone, had passed between his lips;

And down to knees he violently fell, his chest in a spasming heave,
And a single, lonely, regretful tear trickled down as he passed into Lethe.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
One of those unexpected poems that just come in the spur of the moment.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Doodley.
This poem was one to ponder; life and death Life is precious and it always should thought that even death is precious; for it is the end of life. Your ending thought spells out this truth........."and a single , lonely, regretful tear trickled down as he passed into lethe. Blessings of life to you Kathy

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. I appreciate your insights on this piece.



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The ending really took me by surprise and I felt that it worked really well.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dolce Vita. I appreciate your insights. Welcome to my poetic do.. read more
Last night I dipped into a similar disturbance by natural course. The beginning of your poem speaks so beautifully of life until of course he goes to his death. The shock of the poem!

Regards,
Al

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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Alfred. I appreciate the insights. And yes, this one was a litt.. read more
Feels like a case of 'not knowing what you had until it was gone' intricate imagery and thoughtfully crafted. Another fine piece. R

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Rach. Your thoughts about this piece are exactly correct. I app.. read more
You are a great writer! Everytime I see something from you it makes me want to read more. Thanks for sharing this spur of the moment peice with us. Its a good one!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, OhSnapShley. I appreciate your very kind words. If you like thi.. read more
OhSnapShley

1 Month Ago

Well now im on my way to stalk to page ;)

Looks like ill be busy for awhile.
Truly a sudden realization somethin that happens to us all wen we find ourselves lost but suddenly we come to a realization that greatly helps us..lovely piece

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, dipsy. I appreciate the thoughts and kind words. Welcome to my .. read more
I interpreted this as not knowing what we have missed until we no longer have it. But, perhaps I'm being to simplistic.
Your poem has an added depth that is hidden in the poignancy of the wording.
Norman
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Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Norman. Your interpretation of this piece is very close to bein.. read more
Doodley.
This poem was one to ponder; life and death Life is precious and it always should thought that even death is precious; for it is the end of life. Your ending thought spells out this truth........."and a single , lonely, regretful tear trickled down as he passed into lethe. Blessings of life to you Kathy

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. I appreciate your insights on this piece.
I love it.
Such rich imagery...yet the flow of words and rhythm carries you along.
There is so much one could read into this piece, as well...it spurs you to think beyond the tale being told. Love this line: Of flowers bloomed by natures groom, with scents forever sweet;
Very nicely done.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Reedwrite. The second time you have reviewed this one. Thanks f.. read more
ReedWrite

3 Months Ago

LOL...i see that. It was good enough to read it again. :)
Your words paint a vivid image of this man's last moments. How the time seems to slow down as he takes his last breaths, how he takes in the absolute beauty of the world before surrendering to death, even his death is palpable. I also love your use of Lethe, the river to the underworld where the drinkers forget their past lives adds volumes to this piece. It leaves the reader wanting more information, which is the hook that grabs them. Great work.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Chaos. A very good interpretation of the piece. I appreciate th.. read more
I love the unconventionality of this piece...it has its own unique flow.
It is poignant in its own way...not a darkness, but a gentle sadness, if that makes sense.
I liked it very much.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Reedwrite. I appreciate the kind words.

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Added on October 13, 2016
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Tags: Poem, epiphany, life, death, suicide, realisation

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Sydney , Australia



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