In Nomine Patris

In Nomine Patris

A Poem by Doodley
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In the Name of the Father.

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So cold comes the night to smite the last of day,
Oh! Suffer the little children whereupon their beds they lay;
Entombed and huddled silent under cloth mounds of last defense,
Hands clasped together in hopeful prayer while fearful heart repents.

Grim darkness petrifies their mental boundaries at the seams,
And the demons born from Beelzebub torment their sleeping dreams;
But for them there is no greater fear than the realism horror,
That comes to them cloaked in candlelight, a Nosferatu in a collar.

With creeping sinews and talons shown it invades their personal space,
And whispers with a forked tongue and a leer upon its face;
That, naughty child you must be punished for all your little sins,
Then enshrouded in protective dark it does unspeakable things.

Into and beyond the witching hour their living nightmare stays,
And manifests its evil intent in all unfathomable ways;
And only when the blinkered God from the Heavens He does send,
The virgin rays of newborn light does their ordeal finally end.

And into the dying shadows does the vampyric malevolence flee,
And leaves behind the broken child, alone, yet finally free;
Who hugs their knees into their chest and breaks into sobbing sighs,
As another portion of their innocent soul fades out and silently dies.

As this withered quill in solemn pause does halt as this poet thinks,
The tears of human sorrow infuse the potting of his inks;
And northward turns his remorseful gaze into the heavenly skies,
And with eyes ablaze with swelling rage he opens up and cries:

Where are ye Holy Shepherd? Look at the hour upon the clock!,
Make haste from your eternal slumber! Come now! Protect your flock!;
Embrace these innocents to your girth, spare them from further shame,
From the evil deeds that have been wrought in your sacred Holy name!

Yet the silence here is deafening, there are no swift replies,
No rapturous roars of vengeance shall descend from these empty skies;
And in this instant realisation does the heart sink deep like stone,
Suffer the little children shall, for the children are alone.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A darker poem. Be warned.

Any comments are greatly appreciated

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Faith and hope are important to continue in life often when darkness is there and threatens...
"As this withered quill in solemn pause does halt as this poet thinks,
The tears of human sorrow infuse the potting of his inks;
And northward turns his remorseful gaze into the heavenly skies,
And with eyes ablaze with swelling rage he opens up and cries: "--love this section of this!

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Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate your insights and kind words.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

11 Months Ago

You are welcome!
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One of the works on Writerscafe which puts professionally published, best selling authors to shame! I personally feel you have outdone yourself in 'In Nomine Patris'. The element of dereliction, desolation and fear is blent in extremely well and the poetic ability to weave a tale of reality and of moral abyss. The use of visual metaphors as always is sharp, but I feel they hit bull's eye in your latest. The slight sliver of hope, with promise of retribution is brutally snatched away with reality and realization, which further adds to the haplessness of the subject victims and the empathizing reader.
What you set out with this poetry is achieved- To invoke introspection, evoke dread and an extreme grappling with an uncomfortable truth,

Time and again, I got visuals from the movie 'Doubt', and the term "missionaries of charity" never felt more acerbic.

I honestly feel this should be sent for publication.
Hard-hitting, uncompromising in intent and compelling- Your poem has it all!

Excellent work this is!

Keep writing and spreading the awe!

Best,
M.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. Much, much too kind with your words and praise in this.. read more
The abuse and the terror feed fear into the small kids making them vulnerable to the outer exposure. These atrocities silence their voices.Those innocent small flowers, after having weeped and sobbed, close their hearts and cage their minds permanently. Those cruel and ruthless beasts never seem to realize what they do is a sin that can never be forgiven.The pain they inflict upon the children is heinous and condemnable. Childhood plays an important part in shaping the future of a person. I don't know if there is someone out there up who is seeing all this and listening to the prayers but I believe if anyone is there who can actually do something for those kids, it is the good human souls because God lies within the hearts of such folks.
What a truthful and perfect piece this is, sunbae ! Heart touching and very very deep.This is surely one of the darkest pieces I have ever read.You are an awesome writer. I am speechless and I really don't have enough words to describe the greatness and excellence of this piece of poetry.
All I can say is - take a bow and kudos.
Keep inspiring and keep writing!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. A very kind and comprehensive review on this piece. .. read more
Dark but amazing. The imagery you created left me with chills. Thanks for sharing this piece of work!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, OhSnapShley. Very kind words on this piece.
Yes, dark indeed, but beautiful in its pain and darkness...beautiful because these are words that need to be spoken...an atrocity that needs to be seen in the light. I think we have all wondered, where is the justice? Where is God? How can He allow this to happen. I don't know the answer...but I still believe that there is a plan...and perhaps it is in the knowing that He prods us--His people--to act. Perhaps it is our responsibility to bring the darkness to light, and cleanse it...and perhaps it starts with one poet's pen.

Nicely done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, ReedWrite. I appreciate your thoughts on this piece.I hope i ha.. read more
The children are helpless indeed and very vulnerable to suffering and abuse in homes, religious places and public spaces. If not punished by those children and their families through the law , God will smite the abusers one day with a great vengeance for His justice is always will be done and always complete. I know some people don't believe in Divine justice and retribution but that is their prerogative...Excellent, sir...:).................

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. I appreciate your insights on the theme of this piece. Di.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome, sir....::::;))))
Hit home. Seems not many are saved unless they learn to save themselves... perhaps divinity is within and those too scared to take on the role of savior can never be saved...
Just a thought..
But al the praise to you for keeping the rhyme and flow going and bringing that raw emotion! Beautiful work, as usual

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, A.Marie. I appreciate your thoughts and kind words. And perhaps.. read more
I love the dark style this was written in, and very well written indeed. In the beginning as the abuse children would endure, you accurately described the horrors in which a child can be affected and the horror which it itself is the spawn of nightmares.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Nini. A very dark style, indeed! I appreciate your kind words.
It's a mystery. Not only why people do these things, but why nothing is done about it. The helpless are left to suffer abuse while their protector does nothing. Those final notes are endlessly deep and somber. I've never been one for religious debate, but this poem is the perfect voice of one who doubts. Everything in it is so relevant and feels so accurate to life.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. Your thoughts on this piece are exactly correct. Noth.. read more
I've never been religious. So i don't believe these people will suffer retribution. Not until the little children seek revenge. But every day we see it. They always seem to get to their 60s and 70s. Rant over.
Your poem is overwhelming in words.


Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Paul. I appreciate your thoughts on this piece. I have to agree.. read more
Direct, powerful and honest words and thoughts. The poem told a sad story. People, who harm a child. Need to held responsible and punished. Thank you Dooley for sharing the amazing poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. I appreciate your thoughts and kind words on this piece.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I agree and you are welcome my friend.

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