Forsaken's End

Forsaken's End

A Poem by Doodley
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For Love's abandoned.

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Greetings thee, Darkness, mine friend!
Didst absence leaveth thee bereft and frail?
Returneth has't thee to caress and mend,
Mine anemic heart that love hath fail?

For Siren song hath pierced mine sail,
To smash me against her seductive rocks,
As Ahab fool in pursuit of whale,
I hath fallen as prey to her callous mocks.

Whither once Life shone as bright as beams,
That lit the path of Love mine way,
Hath now been dulled to fog of dreams,
Whither cast adrift and lost I stay.

No more Love's sparrows calleth mine name,
Nor crimson rose bow at mine feet,
For vultures feast this wasted frame,
In exuberant delight at mine defeat.

So comfort me, Darkness, mine friend!
Cloak me tight in thy sable embrace,
And restore the essence of mine blend,
To potent peaks of strength and grace.

Fastened unto thy succored teat,
Away! Away! I shalt dissolve with thee!
To flee these manacles of raging heat,
Unto the lodging that summons me.

Beyond the leap of torture's bound,
Across the desolated glen,
To lay upon the fertile ground,
Betwixt the bowels of shattered men.

Then Darkness, friend, shalt taketh thy leave,
Amidst mine screams of Lycan bay,
Mine suffering soul shalt wail and grieve,
Unless the healing salve holds sway.

And thither beneath forsaken sky,
Amongst mine scores of brethren kin,
I'll lay me down to rest and die,
Beneath the tears of River Fin.

And with mine last of shallow breath,
This fool shalt keepeth mine ears attune,
For Siren song to stall mine death,
Should it returneth to me so soon.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A hybrid confessional archaic poem.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Wonderful words and depth- sometimes being waylaid and mislead and it turns out not as we thought it would be is just another lesson we need to learn at certain points in life - sometimes we need to be certain before we proceed on our emotions - protecting our heart🌹

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Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kelly. I appreciate your thoughts on this poem.
Thoughts In Time

3 Weeks Ago

My pleasure- love reading your words🌹



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Wonderful words and depth- sometimes being waylaid and mislead and it turns out not as we thought it would be is just another lesson we need to learn at certain points in life - sometimes we need to be certain before we proceed on our emotions - protecting our heart🌹

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kelly. I appreciate your thoughts on this poem.
Thoughts In Time

3 Weeks Ago

My pleasure- love reading your words🌹
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Fei
Hi! You reviewed one of my poems a while ago which I only saw just now (sorry!), so I've come to return the favor :)

The archaic style was a brave choice, but I think you really made it work. I also really got into the flow of the rhyming. Great work!

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Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Fei. I appreciate the kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
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The darkness comforts, the darkness caresses, the darkness dissolves the pain. When love and light betray me, darkness is my salve, my eternal friend. A poem so eloquent, the mood so sombre, the meter, flow and the deft rhyming, awesome!

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. I appreciate your very kind words. It is a pleasure to m.. read more
I LOVE this. This is such a powerful story. It seems like this man's grievings have taken over his life. He's lost someone so important to him that he's lost his drive. Your words are packed with emotions and you made them all seem so relatable. The poem has a sort of musical, in how it draws you in and then you become entranced.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hannah. I appreciate the in-depth analysis and kind praise.
wow, what a piece of writing. Your words placed so eloquently and strategically which keeps the reader intrigued. Good work

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lola_Bee. I appreciate the time and kind words.
What can I say apart from brilliant Doodley! What a bittersweet lament at falling prey to the siren song. I loved the references to Ahab etc. Very clever and as usual, absolutely flawless rhyming. Vive la révolution!! Love it!

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. I am sure you read this one before!:) Very kind wor.. read more
Andronicus

7 Months Ago

Perhaps tis true comrade :) But I haven't publicly declared my love for it before! ;)
"And with mine last of shallow breath,
This fool shalt keepeth mine ears attune,
For Siren song to stall mine death,"

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Cloak me tight in thy sable embrace,
And restore the essence of mine blend,
To potent peaks of strength and grace."

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read this poem again, Sami. I appreciate it. Apologies for having n.. read more
The story of a man's loss so great he questions his
remaining days. I know this place, this piece whispered an eerie " remember me". The way in which this flows is not sad but light with a strong stride. The words are sad, wounded and mortal. They lead up to a strength that finds you and pulls you in deep. I feel as if you are not writing about the loss of a person but something loved so great as your youth or then ocean herself. Very touching Poetry

sheer Terror

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sheer Terror. A very insightful analysis of this poem, though m.. read more
TerryDarcy-Ryan   akaSheerTerror

8 Months Ago

You are welcome

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