Forsaken's End

Forsaken's End

A Poem by Doodley
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For Love's abandoned.

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Greetings thee, Darkness, mine friend!
Didst absence leaveth thee bereft and frail?
Returneth has't thee to caress and mend,
Mine anemic heart that love hath fail?

For Siren song hath pierced mine sail,
To smash me against her seductive rocks,
As Ahab fool in pursuit of whale,
I hath fallen as prey to her callous mocks.

Whither once Life shone as bright as beams,
That lit the path of Love mine way,
Hath now been dulled to fog of dreams,
Whither cast adrift and lost I stay.

No more Love's sparrows calleth mine name,
Nor crimson rose bow at mine feet,
For vultures feast this wasted frame,
In exuberant delight at mine defeat.

So comfort me, Darkness, mine friend!
Cloak me tight in thy sable embrace,
And restore the essence of mine blend,
To potent peaks of strength and grace.

Fastened unto thy succored teat,
Away! Away! I shalt dissolve with thee!
To flee these manacles of raging heat,
Unto the lodging that summons me.

Beyond the leap of torture's bound,
Across the desolated glen,
To lay upon the fertile ground,
Betwixt the bowels of shattered men.

Then Darkness, friend, shalt taketh thy leave,
Amidst mine screams of Lycan bay,
Mine suffering soul shalt wail and grieve,
Unless the healing salve holds sway.

And thither beneath forsaken sky,
Amongst mine scores of brethren kin,
I'll lay me down to rest and die,
Beneath the tears of River Fin.

And with mine last of shallow breath,
This fool shalt keepeth mine ears attune,
For Siren song to stall mine death,
Should it returneth to me so soon.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A hybrid confessional archaic poem.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Fei
Hi! You reviewed one of my poems a while ago which I only saw just now (sorry!), so I've come to return the favor :)

The archaic style was a brave choice, but I think you really made it work. I also really got into the flow of the rhyming. Great work!

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Doodley

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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Fei. I appreciate the kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.



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Zoe
Oh wow, you really are well versed with archaic writing style. This work seems so unique. Darkness is a real wicked theme to write on, probably perceived differently by each. You've put forward your thoughts in a real beautiful way. Lovely rhymes. Loved it!

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Yes, i do enjoy using the archaic style. Many of my influe.. read more
Zoe

7 Months Ago

Most welcome!
Great you see you around here again.

I love this poem. After a bad encounter with a siren, it makes sense for one to welcome the darkness, hopefully only briefly. Abandonment can change people, can take a part of who they are.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. And thanks for the welcome back! Took a few months of.. read more
Marvelous with sad tones. You leave your reader speechless with this epic tale of love abandoned. With a pen of strength and a graceful heart , you bring it all into great focus. An excellent one, sir...:)..............

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. Always a pleasure to read your poetry and be read by you .. read more
Sami Khalil

7 Months Ago

You are welcome. ...:::))))
Speechless doodley am speechless..love ur pieces..they get you deep and make you speechless...

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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dipsy. I appreciate your kind words and hope you recover your t.. read more
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mou
Sometime it is really tough to hold on at a turn of life..but it leaves us with many lessons and it's important yet painful to cross that known path again and again..but I like the way you describe the journey somewhere the way of accepting can free a bit of load and with your words you just blow the readers to a wonderful poetic path..as usual your write always fetches an extra care and peaceful heart...just wonderful !!!

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate your kind insights and words on this piece.
I love your poems Doodley. This one broke my heart because I could be that Siren.

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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, ellemorell. There are many such sirens. They take any shape or .. read more
I liked the way you summoned darkness. It's like you are being happy in hard times which is really hard. Truly a very nice write. I liked it.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Najam. I appreciate the thoughts and kind words.
Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

You're welcome. ☺
I enjoyed the journey in your words. You know. Myth and tale is my favorite. More sirens than muses in a life. We need both. Perfect ending to the amazing poetry my friend.
Coyote

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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. I have to agree with your sentiments. Although it appea.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

Always my pleasure to read your work and you are welcome my friend.

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