Gethsemane

Gethsemane

A Poem by Doodley
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Under the olives.

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He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.

Any comments are appreciated.

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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

11 Months Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!



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Amazing... So few words but the impact of emotion is raw! You succeeded with something different, that's for sure!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hebe. I appreciate the kind words.
Very well written.
'Night whispers betray'. Night is usually used as a symbol of pain and betrayal. People seek light in the darkness of night. But usually get astray. :) You've written it so good. *Best wishes*

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, NerdyBeauty. I appreciate the insights and kind words. Welcome .. read more
Ghania

1 Year Ago

You're Welcome, Doodley. :)
Thanks for sharing your work and accepting me as a friend. :P
I think this is the first haiku I've read of yours, Doodley but a powerful one, especially the last line! Poignant write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Yumna. You will find this is my only senryu/haiku. At present a.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You're welcome (:
So much suffered in a huddle of words. A tragedy in seventeen syllables and, incredibly moving.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, emmajoy. I appreciate the kind words.
Mr.Doodley, with very few words you have woven such strength. Alone is how we face our biggest battles, ugliest monsters and the sweetest stabs of betrayal.
A courageous write.

Sheer Terror

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sheer Terror. I agree with your comment. I appreciate the time.
Short but with a unique majesty!
Good work Doodley:)


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Neetha. I appreciate the line. Welcome to my poetic domain.
Neetha

1 Year Ago

Glad to be a part of it Doodley:)
Your experiment has been very successful. You senyru is full of power.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Great Aunt Astri. I appreciate the line.
Short but quite amazing! I've really started to like short pieces. They are so powerful!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gullia. I agree with you, short pieces have a potency all their.. read more
To betray is always about broken trust and no loyality remains,
short with punch, and it is agony to live with daily.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the insights.
Regardless of religious orientation (or lack there of) it is plausible to imagine that there was a good man by the name if Jesus that was persecuted for having radical ideas that threatened the moral high ground of those in power. In few short words you inspire strong feelings of desolation & injustice, and I admire words that make me feel.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, 'elle. Your insights on this piece are very much agreeable and .. read more

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Added on September 5, 2017
Last Updated on March 20, 2018
Tags: Betrayal., Agony, Poem

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Sydney , Australia



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