Gethsemane

Gethsemane

A Poem by Doodley
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Under the olives.

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He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.

Any comments are appreciated.

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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

5 Months Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!



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Mr.Doodley, with very few words you have woven such strength. Alone is how we face our biggest battles, ugliest monsters and the sweetest stabs of betrayal.
A courageous write.

Sheer Terror

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sheer Terror. I agree with your comment. I appreciate the time.
Short but with a unique majesty!
Good work Doodley:)


Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Neetha. I appreciate the line. Welcome to my poetic domain.
Neetha

7 Months Ago

Glad to be a part of it Doodley:)
Your experiment has been very successful. You senyru is full of power.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Great Aunt Astri. I appreciate the line.
Short but quite amazing! I've really started to like short pieces. They are so powerful!

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gullia. I agree with you, short pieces have a potency all their.. read more
To betray is always about broken trust and no loyality remains,
short with punch, and it is agony to live with daily.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the insights.
Regardless of religious orientation (or lack there of) it is plausible to imagine that there was a good man by the name if Jesus that was persecuted for having radical ideas that threatened the moral high ground of those in power. In few short words you inspire strong feelings of desolation & injustice, and I admire words that make me feel.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, 'elle. Your insights on this piece are very much agreeable and .. read more
Nice use of words. You made the reader want more. In the silence of the night. The mind can be overworked. Thank you my friend for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. I appreciate the time and words for this short senryu.
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

Was my pleasure my friend and you are welcome.
dear Doodley... kindness and generosity are a gift that is at times abused, however, more often than not it breathes love and trust in the person bestowed. I am not surprised when I am betrayed, but I am overjoyed when I realize I have helped a person to believe and move on with joy in their heart. Your Senyru is descriptive of betrayal, but even Jesus continued to forgive. truly, Pat p.s. Our life has sad moments.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pat. I agree with you. Life is full of melancholic moments and .. read more
Patricia Wedel

7 Months Ago

You are welcome. Irma has done so much damage to the islands in the Caribbean and is headed to Flor.. read more
The the garden where His sweat became... Unfathomable meaning lies between these words and they evoke both emotion and imagination. Doodley, you always leave me in awe. You are so incredibly talented. :) Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. I appreciate your committed praise for this simple .. read more

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Added on September 5, 2017
Last Updated on March 20, 2018
Tags: Betrayal., Agony, Poem

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Doodley

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