The Tin Man's Prologue

The Tin Man's Prologue

A Poem by Doodley
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Reimaginings.

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If every journey has an ending,
And every story has a start,
Would thy thoughts remain unbending,
That the Tin Man once had a heart?

That he lived a life of leisure,
In the forests of Oz forevermore,
Where the chipmunks frolicked in pleasure,
Upon evergreen seas of wood lawn floor.

Where the canopies teemed with birdsong,
And cicadas serenaded the night,
And the Lunar Queen on velvet throne,
Bathed the land in pearly light.

Tangerine beams of Sun's contentment,
Polished his soul to silver sheen,
And the mist of disenchantment,
In his life, was nowhere to be seen.

And he reveled in joyous solitude,
In his home deep in the woods,
Where his apple orchard gave gratitude,
With unending ripened goods.

Then one glorious tranquil morn,
In the depths of florescent Spring,
Was his covert nurturing faith reborn,
When he heard the voice of an Angel sing.

For there beneath an apple tree,
Stood an emblem of Love divine,
Such a beauteous Nymph as there could be
Caressing the fruits upon its vine.

With cascading falls of golden locks,
And eyes a misterium of onyx hue,
She sang and whirled to emerging flocks,
That flew down to rest from the azure blue.

In the silent whoosh of Cupid's rush,
There amidst the scores of Turtle Dove,
Their gaze did meet through crimson blush,
And they fell to depths of torrid Love.

And there amongst the swelling throng,
They twirled together entwined as one,
As Nature's bards took up the song,
And the Lunar Queen embraced her Sun.

As daylight wilted to twilight gloam,
And starlight shyly twinkled through,
He guided her to his simple home,
Where Life and Love was born anew.

Through the fertility of the Springtime,
And all through the Summer's swell,
Did their heart's converse in Love's rhyme,
In wondrous bliss did they both dwell.

But when Old Man Autumn in rustic fawn,
Encroached the serenity of this place,
Had the creeping tendrils of restless dawn,
Shone ill light upon their Love's solace.

For the Wood Nymph had ambition,
She was no patient Eremite,
And she rebelled in true sedition,
Lured by the Emerald City's bright.

One night under veiled star-fall,
While in dreaming did the Tin Man lay,
The Wood Nymph packed her belongings all,
And stole his radiant heart away.

And when he awoke to sunlight stream,
That shimmered his glossy face,
His world collapsed to nightmare dream,
She had disappeared without a trace.

He trawled through the woods in panic,
Let loose cries and desperate pleas,
That reverberated fleetingly manic,
On the gossiping Autumn breeze.

When his calls echoed in silence,
And stirred no sleeping ghost,
He lapsed into despairing violence,
For loss of things he loved the most.

He wailed in tormented grieving,
Like a baying Hound of Hell,
And struck his chest a-heaving,
His now heartless empty shell.

Then his trusty axe he took to hand,
And Cut! And Chopped! And Sliced!,
Decimating his orchard from the land,
In a whirlwind of rage and vice!

When his madness had abated,
He stood alone under gleaming sky,
As sorrow's waves invaded,
On the breath of his longing sigh.

With his soul now torn asunder,
And with his hope ground into dust,
He hearkened to the distant thunder,
Then cried himself to rust.

All the forest joined to mourn him,
Shed their leaves in solemn prayer,
As the Solar King dialed down to dim,
In respect for the Life lost there.

And the passing days did wither,
Under first frost of Winter's kiss,
Delayed by the Ice Queen's dither,
In her fear of discourteous remiss.

And the Tin Man remained there frozen,
Through all time and Love's decay,
'Till a young girl and Scarecrow chosen,
Walked the Yellow Brick Road his way.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A narrative reimagining. A mixture of Ballad and Epic.

Written with Acknowledgement and respect to L. Frank Baum.

Any comments appreciated. And respect and gratitude to those who endure its length.

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Doooooodley!! Ze revolution can not fail wiz such a master!! What a beautiful recount of life of the tin man before Dorothy. How you tell a tale with such beautiful, lyrical use of the language is a truly inspirational thing to the peasantry. Everything was so beautifully descriptive. "And the Lunar Queen on velvet throne, Bathed the land in pearly light." was just one of the lines that I swooned over. Doodley. Bravo. Long live the revolution!!

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Doodley

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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. A wonderfully kind review. The revolution raises it.. read more



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wonderful imagery!
Question; why did you say chipmunks in the second stanza, why not squirrels, or small furry creatures, or timid mouse

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kael. I appreciate your time and effort in reading this lengthy.. read more
There comes a time in every readers thrill of joy! When one pics up a book to read and it's we writing is clean, clear, and vibrant. This read is like that. I had come across you, Doodly, by reading a comment you left for another wonderful writer in the Writers Cafe. Your comment to that writer's writing was just as clear, and vibrant. Your style of voice is clear and concise. Keep writing and don't stop. I enjoyed this.

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Arthur. I appreciate your kind words and for enduring the lengt.. read more
I love this revisited story through your eyes and words!
Wonderful and playful as I read it with touches of insight and meaning.
Thank you for sharing it.

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Doodley

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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the kind words. And Thank you for enduring .. read more
Daaammn! I LOVE this twist on the classic story of Oz, and I love the metaphor of the Tin Man losing his heart. That final stanza is an amazing way to tie this prologue into the canonical story we all know and love. I can tell that you put a ton of work into constructing this poem - it really shows. Bravo! Brava! Encore!

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. Humbled by your kind praise for this poem. It took me.. read more
This is pretty inventive and quite plausible when you think about it. But then again, you did think about it didn't you. I like this very much, you have a great mind. :)

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Relic. I appreciate the kind words. And yeah! I really did thin.. read more
This is a tour de force Doodley2 :)
He's had more of a life than I this Tin Man.
- not bad for a coke tin bloke.
Kidding aside - this is brilliant.

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tony. I appreciate the kind comments. And ahh the Doodley 2! Ha.. read more
Tony Jordan

2 Weeks Ago

Not a case of endurance when it's this engaging (and original)
Welcome :))
Wow. One word. Wow.
Amazing. V jealous of you ryt now.

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NANCY DON

2 Weeks Ago

Ok. Thanks a load
Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Any time. I look forward to reading you soon. Take care.
NANCY DON

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you my fried
Magnificent work! Baum would be so proud of this my friend...a brilliant creation of the Tin Man’s poignant backstory brought to life in beautiful language, form, cadence and rhyme...i have no proper words to praise this...Oz is always in my heart and so will this poem be now. Master Class piece herefrom inception to completion. I applaud & Thank you so much Doodley!

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. I have no words for such generous praise for this piec.. read more
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Zoe
This is probably one of the most emotional poems of yours. I don't really know why the tin man didn't have a heart, but your conception here (or maybe this was really the reason. Idk) was a great one. Loved the use of such beautiful words and rhymes. Couldn't have been any better.
You and your first class poetry do prove to be an inspiration for me...not just me, but many others I'm sure. Narrative poems are one of my favourites and your poems strengthen my love towards them. I hope to be able to write such wonderful poetry one day. Thank you for sharing!

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Humbled by your words here. In the original story, the Tin.. read more
Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

Oh, wonderful imagination then. It was my pleasure. And thank you, too, for your encouraging words. .. read more
A masterful epic tale for the ages. Grand and diversified for maximum impact. Rich in language, style and emotions. Lengthy but pulls the reader for more. You are waxing poetic great poet.

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Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. Such wonderful comments from a great poet like yourself. .. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Weeks Ago

Whoa. You are most welcome.

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