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The Tin Man's Prologue

The Tin Man's Prologue

A Poem by Doodley
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Reimaginings.

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If every journey has an ending,
And every story has a start,
Would thy thoughts remain unbending,
That the Tin Man once had a heart?

That he lived a life of leisure,
In the forests of Oz forevermore,
Where the chipmunks frolicked in pleasure,
Upon evergreen seas of wood lawn floor.

Where the canopies teemed with birdsong,
And cicadas serenaded the night,
And the Lunar Queen on velvet throne,
Bathed the land in pearly light.

Tangerine beams of Sun's contentment,
Polished his soul to silver sheen,
And the mist of disenchantment,
In his life, was nowhere to be seen.

And he reveled in joyous solitude,
In his home deep in the woods,
Where his apple orchard gave gratitude,
With unending ripened goods.

Then one glorious tranquil morn,
In the depths of florescent Spring,
Was his covert nurturing faith reborn,
When he heard the voice of an Angel sing.

For there beneath an apple tree,
Stood an emblem of Love divine,
Such a beauteous Nymph as there could be
Caressing the fruits upon its vine.

With cascading falls of golden locks,
And eyes a misterium of onyx hue,
She sang and whirled to emerging flocks,
That flew down to rest from the azure blue.

In the silent whoosh of Cupid's rush,
There amidst the scores of Turtle Dove,
Their gaze did meet through crimson blush,
And they fell to depths of torrid Love.

And there amongst the swelling throng,
They twirled together entwined as one,
As Nature's bards took up the song,
And the Lunar Queen embraced her Sun.

As daylight wilted to twilight gloam,
And starlight shyly twinkled through,
He guided her to his simple home,
Where Life and Love was born anew.

Through the fertility of the Springtime,
And all through the Summer's swell,
Did their heart's converse in Love's rhyme,
In wondrous bliss did they both dwell.

But when Old Man Autumn in rustic fawn,
Encroached the serenity of this place,
Had the creeping tendrils of restless dawn,
Shone ill light upon their Love's solace.

For the Wood Nymph had ambition,
She was no patient Eremite,
And she rebelled in true sedition,
Lured by the Emerald City's bright.

One night under veiled star-fall,
While in dreaming did the Tin Man lay,
The Wood Nymph packed her belongings all,
And stole his radiant heart away.

And when he awoke to sunlight stream,
That shimmered his glossy face,
His world collapsed to nightmare dream,
She had disappeared without a trace.

He trawled through the woods in panic,
Let loose cries and desperate pleas,
That reverberated fleetingly manic,
On the gossiping Autumn breeze.

When his calls echoed in silence,
And stirred no sleeping ghost,
He lapsed into despairing violence,
For loss of things he loved the most.

He wailed in tormented grieving,
Like a baying Hound of Hell,
And struck his chest a-heaving,
His now heartless empty shell.

Then his trusty axe he took to hand,
And Cut! And Chopped! And Sliced!,
Decimating his orchard from the land,
In a whirlwind of rage and vice!

When his madness had abated,
He stood alone under gleaming sky,
As sorrow's waves invaded,
On the breath of his longing sigh.

With his soul now torn asunder,
And with his hope ground into dust,
He hearkened to the distant thunder,
Then cried himself to rust.

All the forest joined to mourn him,
Shed their leaves in solemn prayer,
As the Solar King dialed down to dim,
In respect for the Life lost there.

And the passing days did wither,
Under first frost of Winter's kiss,
Delayed by the Ice Queen's dither,
In her fear of discourteous remiss.

And the Tin Man remained there frozen,
Through all time and Love's decay,
'Till a young girl and Scarecrow chosen,
Walked the Yellow Brick Road his way.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A narrative reimagining. A mixture of Ballad and Epic.

Written with Acknowledgement and respect to L. Frank Baum.

Any comments appreciated. And respect and gratitude to those who endure its length.

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Loved reading this, although slightly ashamed to say I literally didn't get the reference until the last stanza, maybe i am not committed enough to our fairytale masterpieces. Although great admiration for the beautiful rhythm and unforced rhyme throughout this. Particularly thought the colour descriptions created idyllic imagery, and really cool change of tone midway through, it altered the rhythm and pace of my reading too which definitely created the desperate feeling. My favourite bit for sure was:
When his calls echoed in silence,
And stirred no sleeping ghost,
He lapsed into despairing violence,
For loss of things he loved the most.
Well done and I love your retelling of story/myth style.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Emma. No shame in not understanding the reference immediately. .. read more



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Marvelous ...... you have this magic
The tone of regret and remorse mixed in with the hope of love
that first kiss and touch bringing him to life
as one wonders is the tin man made of stone.... only he knows as he hallows words that echo within .... of everything he longed for and loved
he would see it for once through her eyes
that life he always wanted

I love your work
Write more
because i need more
and i am back lol

hopefully will write enough to get my book publisher back :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lingering Soul. I appreciate the kind words and you taking the .. read more
Lingering Soul

3 Months Ago

lol
i know ..... i loved it
it wasnt lengthy
Enduring the length was no problem as I read through this piece. A real combination of excellent rhyming verse and content. I loved the axe temper and the mournful result. Great poem and really enjoyable. Rod.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Rod. I appreciate you taking the time to read this lengthy piec.. read more
This poem is deep and touching, and very creative! I love this re imagining of the Tin Man's lost heart. I wish I had a mind as poetic as yours. Very good job! The poem is solid all the way through.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hannah. I appreciate your very kind words. Much gratitude to yo.. read more
Absolutely PHENOMENAL!!!!! I love the mixture and the length is marvelous! Your eloquence and ability to create emotion is surreal. The story itself is marvelous, but is the manner of conveyance that really packs the wallop! I think the timing and flow are perfect - your story moves along nicely, not herky-jerky, not too fast as to lose the character formation, not too slow so as to lose the reader's attention.

Exceptionally well done! You continue to amaze and astound, my friend.

My favorite stanza - because I felt it like a right hook to the heart -

With his soul now torn asunder,
And with his hope ground into dust,
He hearkened to the distant thunder,
Then cried himself to rust.

Powerful, so very, very powerful.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Poetic License. Humbled by your very kind praise. I will admit .. read more
i just cannot write like this....you do the forms so well...and recreate the story with such pizazz....

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. Humbled by your praise. We all have our styles and as ha.. read more
Hey Doodley,
This is so creative! I love the story. Your rhyming flows beautifully & the rich imagery from your descriptions was a treat. I really enjoyed reading this epic tale. You should be proud!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ellemorell

3 Months Ago

In the 15th stanza, did you mean to use ‘did’ in both the 2nd & 3rd line? After reading through .. read more
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, 'Elle. I appreciate the kind words. Noted your 'nitpick' and fi.. read more
ellemorell

3 Months Ago

My pleasure, definitely no endurance required! I really admire the depth of this work.
wonderful imagery!
Question; why did you say chipmunks in the second stanza, why not squirrels, or small furry creatures, or timid mouse

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kael. I appreciate your time and effort in reading this lengthy.. read more
There comes a time in every readers thrill of joy! When one pics up a book to read and it's we writing is clean, clear, and vibrant. This read is like that. I had come across you, Doodly, by reading a comment you left for another wonderful writer in the Writers Cafe. Your comment to that writer's writing was just as clear, and vibrant. Your style of voice is clear and concise. Keep writing and don't stop. I enjoyed this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Arthur. I appreciate your kind words and for enduring the lengt.. read more
I love this revisited story through your eyes and words!
Wonderful and playful as I read it with touches of insight and meaning.
Thank you for sharing it.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the kind words. And Thank you for enduring .. read more
Daaammn! I LOVE this twist on the classic story of Oz, and I love the metaphor of the Tin Man losing his heart. That final stanza is an amazing way to tie this prologue into the canonical story we all know and love. I can tell that you put a ton of work into constructing this poem - it really shows. Bravo! Brava! Encore!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. Humbled by your kind praise for this poem. It took me.. read more

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Tags: Poem, Ballad, Tin Man, love, loss, fable.

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Doodley

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