In Hypocrisies Chapel

In Hypocrisies Chapel

A Poem by Doodley
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Sunday Tears

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'Neath crucified eyes

Larmoyant from sinner's pain

Streaked stain glassed shadows

Genuflect jeremiads

Of an Atheist's love lost.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a Japanese Tanka

Any comments appreciated.

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Ah! This right here is a work of genius. Your poems, Doodley, always take me somewhere far and deep. This one gives me a deeper understanding of the woes of an atheist but it is the supreme quality of your work that I'm always left speechless. Every time I read your stuff I find myself more and more spellbound than ever. I think, words will never be sufficient to say what this poem has taught and shown me.
You're one hell of a poet, my friend!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Suhd. To be honest, I am not profoundly sure myself what I want.. read more
Suhd

1 Month Ago

My pleasure, always.



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Genius at work here. Nothing more to add.

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dawn. I appreciate the time. Welcome to my poetic domain.
This marvelous poems , written by a thinker, tells me many things. First, religion can be so powerful or become so powerful that it corrupts the top echelon, causing multitudes upon multitudes of abuses to their adherents especially the vulnerable ones. All one has to do is read the history of every faith. Secondly, it gives rise to many hypocrites upon the adherents(there are some gullible and some genuine no doubt), that they act like sheep in wolves clothing. This subject is long and it will take volumes...
We all have to find our higher truth and peel off all the falsehoods, reject absolute power in man's hands, rid us of pagan doctrines and so forth. Most religions, even the Abrahaimic ones, borrowed from or share aspects of pagan doctrines and Astrotheology. Just see the similarities. It is mind boggling...

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. A fabulous review! You are absolutely correct here with y.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Weeks Ago

I do agree. Faith has to be simple, genuine and personal with God. We respect authority as long as t.. read more
I stopped going to church when I realised that many who attended should be more Christ like in the way they conducted themselves in their lives. There is hypocrisy in congregations. Your poem brought that feeling back to me.

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

I can't disagree with th at. Yesterday's news about a graveyard in Ireland with the bodies of the ch.. read more
Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Will need to consult the online news. That is rather shocking. The church has much to answer for.
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Unfortunately there is much which is coming out in the open n ow. Some of it truly shocking.

Doodly, I find this tanka to be extremely deep. I may be incorrect, when peeling back the layers of the onion, but I read it as the hypocrisy associated with love. There are those sinners who attend church, genuflect and cry out in pain for the suffering of Jesus, but is their love truly genuine? Is the love they demonstrate truly for God or is it no more than the love expressed by an atheist. Just my take!

Either way this is an awesome write. :)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tamara. Your interpretation of this poem is certainly close to .. read more
Tamara Beryl Latham

2 Weeks Ago

Doodley, wish I knew the real intent. :)

Either way, it was a fun read. I would spe.. read more
Once love is lost it’s hard to be regained, but for those who know not love and it’s meaning are lost from the start- for with love all is possible and through it all love remains- woe to the heart that knows not love- deep and powerfully written🌹

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kelly. Some very wise words you have expressed here. I apprecia.. read more
What reason may eventually reject, the heart can cling to, desperately.
Christ's pain and sorrow were, likely, felt deepest for those who could not accept.
In such cases, it is His love that is truly lost.
Exceptional Tanka!




Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jimmy. Profound thoughts and words on this poem! Much appreciat.. read more
Strong, honest and direct use of words. No wasted words. Thank you Dooley for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. Your time and words are always appreciated.
Coyote Poetry

4 Weeks Ago

My pleasure and you are welcome my friend.
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Zoe
The vocab though! I'm glad I sit with a dictionary in hand whenever I stop by your page.
I think it describes one of those harsh situations that have the power to make an atheist drop down to his knees in complete hopelessness in front of Jesus Christ. Losing the love of your life, of course.
There's so much more to it than it seems. Very well written, Doodley. Hope you've been doing good.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Well Done! Good luck with your results!
Zoe

1 Month Ago

Got the results already! Done unexpectedly well ;-p
Doodley

1 Month Ago

Congratulations! Just like our cricket team. 'Unexpectedly well'.
A very highly literary piece, I did have to Google much to get under it. Speaks to me of being wronged, of being crucified at hypocrisy’s altar. The third line is the most vivid and brings the piece to life. I couldn’t place the fourth line though, it seems a highly literary and cultural reference, beyond my humble scope. Overall, an artful, impact full writing. May the poet find his peace (And Monday sunshine)

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dhara. An interesting insight, though one far from the meaning .. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

1 Month Ago

An atheist in a chapel...I wonder what took him there in the first place. Adds more intrigue.
A very profound write this is. Love is love is love. I feel that everyone not only deserves it but needs it desperately to survive. Your words are powerful and to the point. Well done!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dara. Your words here are the wisest ones I have heard all day... read more

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Added on October 14, 2018
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