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A Poem by Livana Lowell
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my first haiku!

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I kissed an apple
who was also a woman
like bees kiss a rose

© 2016 Livana Lowell



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Livana Lowell
Sooo, what do you think? All criticisms and comments are welcome!

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Simple and sweet. I like this one.

"Like bees kiss a rose."

Very tender and passionate imagery.

The color atop the words also brings more liveliness into the piece.

Also, comparing an apple to a woman (although there are some sour apples: I'll take the red coding to portray a "Red Delicious," which are sweet; and not sour) was a *sweet* use of words. Further strengthening the gentleness of the write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Livana Lowell

1 Year Ago

nah, you're right. I'm just humoring you. Actually apple is also associated with symbolism for somet.. read more
FIN

1 Year Ago

Ah yes, the sinful fruit, forgot about that one in biblical terms! (:
FIN

1 Year Ago

Makes this kiss even more desirable



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This Haiku has just inspired me:

Inspiration

"As Bees to Roses
An Apple did I too Kiss
For She, Soft and Bliss!"

Posted 1 Year Ago


Livana Lowell

1 Year Ago

lol cool. Sounds good.
A kiss is never just a kiss. I liked the poem. Left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


suggesting any word changes my mind perceives would be unfair... might I suggest the final line could add more impact with a little more thought?

I did understand the depth and "feeling" within your thought and the lines flowed well.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Livana Lowell

1 Year Ago

you don't like the last line?
Chris

1 Year Ago

It is not for ME to like or dislike - it is for you to be "good" with the strength of your thought a.. read more
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FIN
Simple and sweet. I like this one.

"Like bees kiss a rose."

Very tender and passionate imagery.

The color atop the words also brings more liveliness into the piece.

Also, comparing an apple to a woman (although there are some sour apples: I'll take the red coding to portray a "Red Delicious," which are sweet; and not sour) was a *sweet* use of words. Further strengthening the gentleness of the write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Livana Lowell

1 Year Ago

nah, you're right. I'm just humoring you. Actually apple is also associated with symbolism for somet.. read more
FIN

1 Year Ago

Ah yes, the sinful fruit, forgot about that one in biblical terms! (:
FIN

1 Year Ago

Makes this kiss even more desirable

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Added on December 21, 2016
Last Updated on December 24, 2016
Tags: haiku, writing, gay/lesbian, bisexuality

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Livana Lowell
Livana Lowell

Huntsville, TX



About
Hello! I’m Livana Lowell, a goofy, little lady from Texas. I graduated from college with a major in English and minor in psychology. I am a bit of city girl, but I love outdoorsy type activities.. more..

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