Chapter One - Eternal Youth

Chapter One - Eternal Youth

A Chapter by SilverInk

I slipped my sleeveless cat hoodie over my denim romper and scanned the room for my sneakers. Rokki tore through my closet yesterday, because I wasn’t at home.

I was at Harvey Lee’s house. I forgot to lock the door to my room, leaving it subject to my cat. But, I never was one for closing doors and windows. I liked to wake up in the morning and feel natural breeze on my face. I liked to be able to see my family walking through the halls. My baby brother, Ashton and step-sister, Shelly. My dad and my step-mom, Violetta. I love them all so much, and I couldn’t live without them.

“Kitty-Marcel! Breakfast is ready!”

Violetta loves to call me Kitty-Marcel. My brother always calls me Kitty-Marcy, and that’s okay, because he’s only three years old, and Katharen-Marcel is a bit of a mouthful.  Violetta sort of just picked it up from him and made it her own. People here do that all the time, with gifts and special abilities and such.

I did. I don’t know who I got it from, but someone gave me their gift. I’ve never stopped to think about how  it might affect me later, but right now, I wouldn’t trade it for the world. My constant innocence, and laughter, and fun.

My eternal youth.


Most people flaunt their abilities once they know they have them. Some are small, and useless, like not having to blink.

But there are more extreme ones, like breathing underwater.

I’m not sure where I fall on the spectrum. You can’t exactly waltz up to people and tell them you have eternal youth, because they’ll take it the wrong way. They’ll think you’re immortal or something, which is not the case. There's no word for my gift, so that's what I'm forced to call it. My body will age, and I’ll die just anyone else. It’s my mind that won’t age. I’ll always be up for a game of hide and seek, and I cry from time to time.

And I sure as heck love rainy days.





© 2017 SilverInk



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Interesting start. I enjoyed the inner monologue of the main character, though I must say that paragraph 4 (the one that starts with "Violetta loves to call me..." feels told instead of shown.

I would suggest for you to consider peppering in this information later, to prevent it from having that "info dump" feel. Other than that, it flowed very well.

Yari

Posted 2 Months Ago


SilverInk

2 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Yari!
Really nice first chapter. The characters were introduced very well. I'm excited to continue reading

Posted 3 Months Ago


SilverInk

3 Months Ago

So glad you liked it!

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