Fall

Fall

A Poem by MainStream




It’s a blue,

     a beautiful day,

    and I’m inside.

   All my leaves,

      have fallen down,

        now I'm leafless.



© 2017 MainStream



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Minimal and yet astonishing complete, this poem captures a world of feelings into few words. It makes me remember the grate haiku masters who were able to think and think for years before writing one single poem of no more then four verses.
Fall is a strange season: it is the preparation for winter, which is the death of nature and those long nights and stormy days naturally bring you to meditation. In your verses you succede to recreate that particular atmosphere. And it's beautiful, in its bittersweet way.
Nice poem indeed.

Posted 6 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

MainStream

6 Months Ago

Thanks, I always appreciate any review because it helps me have insight into what others opinions ar.. read more



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I bleed for this. Simple ans beautiful

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MainStream

3 Months Ago

I agree, it is very simple and beautiful.
I really just love how I was able to feel time pass as I read each line after the next! Super tranquil

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MainStream

3 Months Ago

Tranquil fits this piece perfectly. Thank you.
"its a blue, beautiful day" no need to repeat "It's a". I don't know what your going for with this poem, and that may just be me. Redundant, if all your leaves have fallen down, then of course you are leafless. are you a tree? you can take "and I'm inside" and make it "im inside."
Its a blue,
beautiful day,
I'm inside
Now--leafless.
Simplicity without redundancy. of course you could stick with the other halves. or a mix.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Love this poem! You show the perfect transition of a tree through this season that happens to be my favorite. Yet, one day you'll bloom once again with more writing in store. :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simple to read but the image is clear. I like the personification.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Being bare is very vulnerable ...but also drawing.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adore the visual presentation of this piece. The stark, falling words to a single, final leaf. Exceptionally well done, adding a sense of visual art to complement the piece.

As for the piece itself, the simplicity of these lines are wistful. Also being a huge tree and nature lover, I can very well hear my great twin oaks moaning this against today's winter skies.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice use of nature to make your point. You made the reader feel the loneliness and the separation. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Minimal and yet astonishing complete, this poem captures a world of feelings into few words. It makes me remember the grate haiku masters who were able to think and think for years before writing one single poem of no more then four verses.
Fall is a strange season: it is the preparation for winter, which is the death of nature and those long nights and stormy days naturally bring you to meditation. In your verses you succede to recreate that particular atmosphere. And it's beautiful, in its bittersweet way.
Nice poem indeed.

Posted 6 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

MainStream

6 Months Ago

Thanks, I always appreciate any review because it helps me have insight into what others opinions ar.. read more
very creative. can't get much more fall than this ...

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MainStream

6 Months Ago

Thanks. Nice to receive your input, Pete.

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