The Man Who Tried - A small collection of limericks.

The Man Who Tried - A small collection of limericks.

A Poem by Con Campbell
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Three short limericks. We can do anything if we try. It's not always simple, but there is always a way.

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The Man Who Tried

A small collection of limericks.




There once was a man who cried,
Who kept on telling himself lies,
He wanted to deceive,
Never one to believe,
That struggling man who cried.

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There once was a man who tried,
He worked, taking all in his stride,
He started to achieve,
What he never believed, 
That not-so-bad man who tried.

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There is now a man with some pride,
His work paying off because he tried,
And now he suspects,
That he has some prospects,
That ambitious man with some pride.


© 2017 Con Campbell



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I liked the story and the logic in the poem.
"There is now a man with some pride,
His work paying off because he tried,
And now he suspects,
That he has some prospects,
That ambitious man with some pride."
The above lines. I do believe. You will be rewarded. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Days Ago


Con,
Your works tend to deal with direr depths of emotion, the human factor of struggle, a sense of tragedy, even touches of pain and darkness.
Limericks are traditionally meant to express humor, yet yours follow suit with the nuances mentioned above.
Still, I suppose there is no law against a serious Limerick, and (in fact) I've enjoyed yours.
A few issues I'll mention that will improve them, and one is: be consistent in the same syllable count of lines 1, 2 and 5, and lines 3 and 4. Another is some of your rhymes are off -- needing variety, as-well, punctuation. Then, a bit if syntax adjustment and repositioning could solve that.
Let me illustrate this with Limerick #1, edited to 7/7/6/6/7:

There once was a gent who cried;
to himself, quite often lied.
He was wont to deceive,
never one to believe
that strugg'ling man who's inside.

You can see how easily the other two could be set to tighter structure and more appealing syntax; therefore, more enjoyable to read and easier to grasp.

Thank you for the joy of reviewing and the honor of critiquing for you, Con … hoping I did good for you, my new friend! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 1 Week Ago


Con Campbell

1 Week Ago

Thanks again for the critique Richard! I know that limericks are designed for one thing but I wanted.. read more
Richard

1 Week Ago

Any way I can enjoy another's work and help them improve on it is a genuine pleasure for me, Con ….. read more
Nice work, Con! Simple but speaks to so many people, not just men. Your words powerfully convey not only struggle but hope and triumph. I look forwarding to reading more of your work.

Posted 1 Month Ago



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Added on December 12, 2017
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Con Campbell
Con Campbell

Hull, Yorkshire, United Kingdom



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