Tracking Stars

Tracking Stars

A Poem by Richard Layne

cold night, stars, trains but no aliens


Tracking Stars

You’re out back,

Tracking stars with your telescope,

Plotting progress against the cold night sky.


The train yard beyond the woods is full of activity

The hard match strike of the engine as it fires

You don’t want to be here.


You look back towards your house.

The lighted lone window where she’s watching TV

You go back to your telescope


The labored breathing,

blowing of the locomotives as they work their way up the tracks,

Moving cars into the line.


It’s cold.  The night sky is vibrant black.

You track the stars

Saiph, Rigel, Bellatrix


You wonder how things turn out this way

Small things set into place,

 words spoken.  Action taken.


You listen to the engines push

Push the weighted tons forward

The crunch of metal on metal


The light in the house goes out

The whole house is as dark

You lose Sirius in the telescope and squint into blackness and vapored breath


The train cars collide and lurch forward, faster and faster

Like dominoes falling

You look back toward the house again and don’t think about going in.


The squeal and hum of momentum



© 2011 Richard Layne

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great imagery in this. i really feel like im watching something

Posted 5 Years Ago

This piece gave me so much to think about, as i was reading it i was falling into a familiarity of emotions this piece portrays. great write :)

Posted 5 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thought provoking!! very nice word use... flows very evenly!! well penned my friend... well penned!!

Posted 5 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a brilliant glimpse into the sky and the world in movement around us... The eyes look out into the depth of the darkness and sense the collision of time and space. Powerful.

Posted 5 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful images you pen

Posted 5 Years Ago

Really great poem you have crafted here. The uniqueness of it all is splendid, I must say. Very well-crafted with a nice flow of words. Great job!

Posted 5 Years Ago

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Added on December 21, 2011
Last Updated on December 21, 2011


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