Catastrophe

Catastrophe

A Poem by Snow Angel

To care or not to care
  is what Shakespeare should have written.
If I can't satisfy myself
how can I satisfy others
I can't force myself to have a positive perspective 
I've tried to accept everything for what it is but
it seems like everything is beyond my control.
How can I believe I have control over anything
 when I don't have the ability to control how I feel?
I am trapped in a loop of catastrophes 
searching a way to escape
I desire to find the light at the end of the tunnel
where I can find peace of mind
 






© 2017 Snow Angel



Author's Note

Snow Angel
I really wish I didn't have to put this as note. I'm aware that I'm an amateur. I still have a lot to learn when it comes to rules of writing. I would appreciate if you would comment on positive aspects of my writing. Constructive criticism is welcomed but only if you give me an example to help me improve my writing. Please don't insult my writing. I believe were all on this site for support and not to ask "If its good enough." nor "If it's great." Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.

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Many writers convey feelings like this, but you've done it in a way that sounds very fresh & imaginative rather than dreary & depressed. Everything you state makes sense, but it also makes me want to show you about choosing a happy outlook instead of feeling so out of control. Your questioning style is perfect for this kind of introspection. I believe in the 2nd line, it would sound better as: "Shakespeare should have written" . . . no need to consider yourself an amateur. This is perfectly good writing! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Snow Angel

3 Months Ago

Thank you barleygirl. Your're review inspired me. :)



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Many writers convey feelings like this, but you've done it in a way that sounds very fresh & imaginative rather than dreary & depressed. Everything you state makes sense, but it also makes me want to show you about choosing a happy outlook instead of feeling so out of control. Your questioning style is perfect for this kind of introspection. I believe in the 2nd line, it would sound better as: "Shakespeare should have written" . . . no need to consider yourself an amateur. This is perfectly good writing! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Snow Angel

3 Months Ago

Thank you barleygirl. Your're review inspired me. :)
well i thought it was a great job,and poem

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This sums up your title and there is an angry mood present as I read it--so, you have brought in the senses with your words here and created a mood with them.
If that is your intentions, you have accomplished it well along with having a structure present to convey your idea. Punctuation is used sparely in this and your ending has none. These are my thoughts on this as a poem and on the overall presentation of your subject.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very strong piece! We all, at some point, have the feeling of powerlessness. There are so many things over which we have no control, sometimes even ourselves. The best we can do is to struggle through and do the best we can. I think you are well on your way to achieving that for yourself. Keep up the good writing.

Take care - Dave

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loving the ideas behind this piece, and as I am only an amateur myself, I don't believe in belittling other people's work when my own can still be improved. The questions asked in this are questions we ask ourselves every day, and some of us are still waiting for our answers. Great Write :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very powerful, I think that you are very skilled for an amateur as you say. It takes skill to write poetry and I think you have a lot of potential, I think that the opening statement was very striking and I was personally interpreting this as being linked to mental illness as a feel of loss of control is often linked to this, but that's probably just my thoughts. I hope to see you writing longer poems in the future!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Snow Angel

8 Months Ago

Thank you for your review and comments it was very inspiring and it made me smile. I look forward to.. read more
Yes Erica. We lose control.
"if I can't even control how I feel?
Its nothing but a catastrophe."
I believe we need control madness. Life seem to turn against us. I enjoyed the poem. I felt the energy and lost of control. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don’t think the ‘Bard’ would be too upset paraphrasing his words; probable the opposite! Did you know - Catastrophe comes from the Greek κατά (kata); meaning down and στροφή (strophē) meaning turning. Together they form the expression down turning; something, I might add, you poetic contribution does not. Very well presented and composed.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Wow! Amazing!
This is so relatable.
Incredible imagination!
"How can I believe I have control over anything
if I can't even control how I feel?
Its nothing but a catastrophe."
Kudos!


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 16, 2017
Last Updated on September 7, 2017
Tags: care, depression, anxiety, control, catastrophe, lost

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Snow Angel
Snow Angel

Toms River, NJ



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