Oily Heart

Oily Heart

A Poem by Richard McLin
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Oil man, what is it for, and where does it come from? My 1st foray into beat poetry takes a stab at answering these questions.

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Oil, Man
Covers Ducks for Soap Commercials
Also covers your soul

Slick, grease Man
Makes it hard to walk up your corporate ladder 
created on the corpses of fossills

Dead, Ancient Bones Man
They died so our case could move
and our bank accounts would grow

Oil
Man, Oil



© 2018 Richard McLin



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This was profound. I have listed it as one of my favorites. You tell a monumental truth in very few words. I have friends that work in the oil industry and I guess that is why this poem speaks to me. I have seen very few writers on this site pull off a work like this. Bravo to you brother!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

I am humbled by your review. I thank you for your very kind words. If something I write can have thi.. read more



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You've captured the slime of materialism Man has willingly slunk himself too. And better allegory than that of oil and grease. You make your points strongly and how.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

2 Months Ago

Thank you very much. Very high praise, and I appreciate it.
This is real poetry. I live by Lake Erie and Lake St. Clair. Detroit and Cleveland dropped waste from the factory for a 100 years. Both lake are dead. Oil companies even more colder. My unit in the Army helps clean-up the oil spill in the dead sea. We had to burn away the diesel. What men do for profit? A powerful and worthwhile write Richard.
Coyote

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

2 Months Ago

Thank you for the review. Was my first attempt at this sort of poetry, and it seems to be going over.. read more
Why does this remind me of a song called "cotton eyed joe"?

It's good work and this isn't necessarily a bad thing... but... all I can think about is that f*****g cotton eyed joe song now.

You son of a b***h. That s***s gonna stick around my brain pan for at least a week, perhaps two.

I swear I had something relevant to say about your poem but... cotton eyed joe; where did you come from... where did you go?


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

2 Months Ago

If it hadn’t been for Cotton Eye Joe, I’d been married a long time ago.
Demers David

2 Months Ago

That song is audible herpes.

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BBP
The title drew me in and you didn't disappoint! :)

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Richard McLin

2 Months Ago

Thank you. My first serious attempt at a Beat Poetry type poem, and I had a lot of fun with it. Than.. read more
Very edgy! I like it! It definetly outlines the greed of the oil industry and ecological disregard of the environment. In the end, all things are, including our consciences, can be bought.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for the review.
Oil man, oil...this is cool man, cool! Great presentation, Richard!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much. Much appreciated.
I like when I read a poem with an unexpected subject, because I seem to write in one subject lol, I find Your poem powerful, emotive too, the style, the title, and the ending is perfect, a tune of anger and sadness, wanting all to see, I can imagine some tears on the eyes of the oily man reading Your words, they touch his heart... I'm thinking of Your last two lines in two ways, one to note into the oily man with sadness, the second, speaking to "man", human, of oil and what it does... a solid piece, thank You*

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your review, very kind. My first real attempt a different for of poetry, and I'm glad .. read more
a stark reality, well said. gotta keep it flowing at all costs. keep those fires burning, cars moving and wheels greased at any cost. fossil fuel not for the faint of heart. thinking about the massive oil spill that happened in the gulf. poignant ...

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
This was profound. I have listed it as one of my favorites. You tell a monumental truth in very few words. I have friends that work in the oil industry and I guess that is why this poem speaks to me. I have seen very few writers on this site pull off a work like this. Bravo to you brother!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

I am humbled by your review. I thank you for your very kind words. If something I write can have thi.. read more
When the Silent spring finally comes And all the birds are in a museum. We'll sell our souls for a crown So the grandchildren can pay to see them.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Well put my friend. Thanks for the review.
Tate Morgan

3 Months Ago

you are welcome

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Richard McLin
Richard McLin

Salem, OR



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