Our Time Together

Our Time Together

A Poem by Richard McLin
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We journey through the years of a man who experiences great love, and great loss.

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I

I saw her in June
but spoke to her in August.
We began dating in September,
but didn't make love till November


II

We moved in together in January,
But bought the dog in March.
I proposed in June,
but didn't marry till the next July.

III

We honeymooned in August,
but returned in September.
She was late in October,
but it wasn't official till November.

IV

She was due in July,
but delivered in June.
He was a month old in July,
but we didn't celebrate till August.

V

She got sick in February,
but didn't get checked out till April.
She was diagnosed in May,
but didn't start treatment till June.

VI

Baby turned one in June,
but she got sicker in July.
She went back to the hospital in August,
but passed away in September.

VII

Her funeral was in October,
but it didn't hit me till November.
Baby missed her in December,
but forgot her in January.

VIII

Baby turned two in June,
but I told him more about her in July.
I cried all through the month of August,
but wiped the tears in September.

IX

Went on a date in March,
but the second date wasn't till May.
Wasn't ready in June,
but decided to try again in August.

X

Met her in February,
but didn't date her till April.
She met my son in June,
but we didn't make love till August.

THE END

Richard McLin 2018

© 2018 Richard McLin



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Author's Note

Richard McLin
This is a poem structure that has worked well for me in two previous poems (Journey Through My Psyche, and Young Love). Hope you all enjoy this one.

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This is good for many reasons. Even though the lines lead to a month, there's still a punch to it all by the end of the poem. It can take so much time to get over a loved one's death; then to start over again with someone new seems almost impossible. The heart is so heavy and the doubt is so present. Life is hard.

Great job on this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for the Review.



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Wow. Awesome work.
I bought tickets for the show and I loved it.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you. This is the third poem I've used this structure on, and I really like using it.
Time past and present.. slowly into the future. A clever, near academic style of writing that wins full colours because of its sadness. Can't say I 'enjoyed' your post but admire it as much for youR absolute writing skills. The final stanza hit my tear ducts.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your review. Sad poems are my specialty, but this one was particularly hard to write d.. read more
I could not help to remember both grandmothers that passed away in less than a year while reading your poem. His way of facing her passing and how he was struck by it months later. A beautiful poem indeed.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much.
a well structured, mournful journey into a man's life as he tries to pick up the pieces and continue on. good write.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you, a piece I was very happy with, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Amazing..... how things work out its a mystery but yes there's a time and place for everything under the sun, the waiting and trying to understand it all in the meantime is what can make you lose hope- all good things come to those who wait, love it, well written.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for the great review.
Rose Petal🌹

3 Months Ago

My pleasure🌹
I wasn't sure at first about the structure ... but it works really well with the storyline
But more importantly it evoked an emotional reaction in me ... the mark of good writing
:))

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much. It's a structure I've grown to really enjoy, but don't want to over use, which .. read more
This is good for many reasons. Even though the lines lead to a month, there's still a punch to it all by the end of the poem. It can take so much time to get over a loved one's death; then to start over again with someone new seems almost impossible. The heart is so heavy and the doubt is so present. Life is hard.

Great job on this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard McLin

3 Months Ago

Thank you for the Review.

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Richard McLin
Richard McLin

Salem, OR



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