Advertise Here
Want to advertise here? Get started for as little as $5
Solemnly Swear
An action-packed suspense thriller that explores the fragile balance between justice and self-preservation.
taylor saved me

taylor saved me

A Poem by i am LiLy
"

poem because.

"

© 2017 i am LiLy



My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

i like the time play...beginnings are endings have ended and now begin ;) its a paradox that is cerevral yet there are deep emotions woven into this poem ... Schitzophrenics (i have read) have described the experience of thier own bodies in such disconnected ways .. as "when i am asleep i am dead" ..i can so relate to placing one's happiness in another ..and how it most assuredly will not work ...we all need to come to our own self worth and acceptance and happiness before any loving of others ..boy your poem has got me goin' Lily ;) we "put " other people on for a try and sadly that doesn't work either ... and in the end your poem brings me to my own self revelation of sin ... and the need to wipe that slate clean and begin again...your poem hooked me held me and inspired me Lily... so well done says i! well done indeed!
E.


Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i am LiLy

4 Months Ago

I feel really crappy today my friend so thank you for your kind words.......it's ironic I'm laying i.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

i am aware of Tailor Swift but the best i do these days keeping up with the music world is to watch .. read more
i am LiLy

4 Months Ago

thank you sweet ....I'm feeling better today...huge hugs.x



Reviews

i like the time play...beginnings are endings have ended and now begin ;) its a paradox that is cerevral yet there are deep emotions woven into this poem ... Schitzophrenics (i have read) have described the experience of thier own bodies in such disconnected ways .. as "when i am asleep i am dead" ..i can so relate to placing one's happiness in another ..and how it most assuredly will not work ...we all need to come to our own self worth and acceptance and happiness before any loving of others ..boy your poem has got me goin' Lily ;) we "put " other people on for a try and sadly that doesn't work either ... and in the end your poem brings me to my own self revelation of sin ... and the need to wipe that slate clean and begin again...your poem hooked me held me and inspired me Lily... so well done says i! well done indeed!
E.


Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i am LiLy

4 Months Ago

I feel really crappy today my friend so thank you for your kind words.......it's ironic I'm laying i.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

i am aware of Tailor Swift but the best i do these days keeping up with the music world is to watch .. read more
i am LiLy

4 Months Ago

thank you sweet ....I'm feeling better today...huge hugs.x
I have mixed feelings about this. On the one hand, it's deep, there are a number of juicy lines ('when I'm asleep, I'm dead', 'this story ends but has no end'). But on the other, the meaning is not entirely presented and the musicality could use some tweaking. I'm not sure where you stand with such critiques, but I'm just stating my honest opinion in a friendly fashion. This is good work for a start. It could be improve, though, just as much as the next poet's.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

7 Months Ago

Hey, we're all troubled. I know exactly what you're going through.

Musicality, to an.. read more
i am LiLy

7 Months Ago

thank you my friend...your words and encouragement mean a lot to me.....I'm so happy you read my wor.. read more
emipoemi

7 Months Ago

Just doing my part ;)

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

190 Views
2 Reviews
Rating
Added on November 10, 2017
Last Updated on November 10, 2017
Tags: poem i am lily

Author

i am LiLy
i am LiLy

United Kingdom



About
i'm lost but try to create and express my existence somehow. i feel broken and numb but I write because it stops my life ending. i record sounds and audio that i feel like is somehow between sound .. more..

Writing