SILHOUETTES

SILHOUETTES

A Poem by Jeff Bresee

Slow death transcends the rush of tide

Still breath beneath a smoke filled sky

Pale ghosts arising from the past

Stand row by row from first to last

Like silhouettes of lifeless trees

In setting sun, no foot shall flee

But sink they into desert sand

While hate consumes the life of man 

 

…Jeff Bresee


© 2010 Jeff Bresee



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I love it. It is beautiful- I think...and I am an unsure philosopher, but I do think- that this is how a poem should be: a moment of beauty in the mind's eye of the reader. Some people like to make a statement with poetry that makes you struggle against it's tide of ill-fitting lines and call it modernist. I think art can be thought-provoking without being ugly. Yours is. It sits in the mouth perfectly and bears reading again and again. Well done, really.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Well I like it but I don't actually know what it's about. Nice pacing, great imagery (just not sure if my image is the same as yours) :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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From what I gleam, this is the moment of death for a person. However, at this cusp before the end s/he is filled with the aforementioned hate. It is this hate, this intense, passionate emotion that at last instant tears consciousness away from even its own oblivion...giving birth to a ghost. Just one of the other specters present, as if waiting for this newest one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is just so creepily, eerily beautiful. The last sentence is definitely going to leave a mark.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Pale ghosts arising from the past
Stand row by row from first to last

This just speaks to me, in a way... and I think it could speak to anyone. I think to add on what RainyDay said, I believe poetry should be both thought-provoking and universal. These lines perfectly mesh with the imagery and mood of the poem. Great job overall.


Posted 7 Years Ago


I liked the line " In setting sun, no foot shall flee..." Positivity lyrical.

I noticed you are fond of the aabb rhyme form... which, in of itself is not so bad, but when one reads many of your pieces in succession they tend to run together. It is a small nit, though; I almost feel apologetic for mentioning it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Dear Jeff,

Beautiful words for sure. Most of the meaning is clear. Some parts are a bit difficult to interpret. I read the poem a half dozen times since it was short. Meaning increased with each reading. Still I'm not with you on everything. Nonetheless, the words were gorgeous. High rating for that. If clarity increased a bit this would be an absolutely stellar piece. Still, high grades. Congratulations!

Best regards,

Rick

Posted 7 Years Ago


great short poem. I would have liked to see it longer, but great title, "silhouettes." has a lot of depth and well crafted. a great poem. thanks for sharing

Posted 7 Years Ago


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JRB
truth be told, nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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LSS
I like the poem and the imagery, but I am having trouble seeing what prompted you to write it. What are you seeing as you gaze on the scene of those dead trees? What prompted you to add the last line, to intrude into our solitude and serenity that awful word that we all flee from, 'hate'? I guess I'm one of those who loves nature and appreciates its pristine beauty. It is my sanctuary to run to when all else fails, and I need its moments to return to sanity. So I guess I really do see what you see, if you too flee to its embrace.
lar

Posted 7 Years Ago


i thought this was an amazing write the imagery in this was well done... overall great job on this brillant piece!!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Jeff Bresee
Jeff Bresee

Dallas, TX



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I love to write poetry and then turn it into songs. I am a singer/songwriter for Weathered Pages, a Fort Worth, Texas based band. Check us out at www.weatheredpages.com And I hope you enjoy .. more..

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