Slow Waltz

Slow Waltz

A Poem by J. K. Beach

We all move to the music--Ellington,

Miller,    a little Shaw.

smiles and laughter everywhere--

most just happy to have reached our age still able to dance.

 

Two figures

call her Macy,

call him Ben,

hold sway center floor,

where,

bathed in cool crisp light,

they dance,     alone

in a room bursting with people.

 

They are not laughing,

not blithe like the others,

but lost in themselves,

barely smiling,

defectors from the ebullient scene

in masque all around them.

Simply two souls

cloaked by the music,

whirling and sweeping

without effort around the room.

determined to cherish their

golden span of shared

choreography.

 

They haven't much time to polish their act before the show.

 

Cancer.

both rotten with it.

Bitter pain comes next.

 

Peering close,

I see that their eyes betray them.

Soon, I know,

they are planning to move beyond the

dark film that separates all things living

from the                                           dead.

Ben and Macy, together--

choosing a slow sweet waltz into darkness.




© 2014 J. K. Beach



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I actually read this the other day but was at a loss for words, it's so affecting. It seemed a warm hug when it started out, but then it turned dark and made my heart hurt. The impact of your poetry is hugely effective. There are tears, pain, love and a life well lived here between the lines, until the somber ending. Comforting yet painful at the same time. Amazing.

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J. K. Beach

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Thank you so much for your kind review... this is one of my favorites, but it was difficult to write.. read more



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I actually read this the other day but was at a loss for words, it's so affecting. It seemed a warm hug when it started out, but then it turned dark and made my heart hurt. The impact of your poetry is hugely effective. There are tears, pain, love and a life well lived here between the lines, until the somber ending. Comforting yet painful at the same time. Amazing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review... this is one of my favorites, but it was difficult to write.. read more
My god... How powerful this is...



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J. K. Beach

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Sorcha... it's a dark subject, but one of my favorites.
It reminded me of a friend.Her untimely death and her inability to admit her love to her beloved..Whenever i look at that guy i feel sorry for him.And your words reminded me of that sad love story. Which could never be fulfilled.You pace the story well. Making the reader more hungry as to where this leads.At the end we are left with a heavy heart. But what an ending.... Delicately finished. Kudos indeed to you :) keep writing.

~Sophy

Posted 2 Years Ago


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You just ripped out my heart in this one. It's beautiful.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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J. K. Beach

2 Years Ago

Thank you Luna! Sorry about the heart ripping thing... kinda comes with the territory... a beautiful.. read more
My heart was in step with every word... I even swallowed hard at the end. Wow, what emotion you have poured into this, Jeff.

I have always had a weakness for the big band sounds, the Frank Sinatra type singers of the 40's, the classy torch singers in their skin tight gowns, singing cross-legged atop a Steinway piano.

What a love story...brilliantly penned, my friend!


Kelly

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

2 Years Ago

Thanks Kelly! My aunt was battling cancer about the time I wrote this and I just couldn't leave the .. read more
Now I might be crazy, but the theme was something to much for words. It was one of those 'What if moments' but gave a nice earth shattering reality moments.

Damn good

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

2 Years Ago

Thank you sir... It was hard getting the tone and the not-so-pleasant moment of truth right in this .. read more
A beautiful poem about the journey into life and death. I like the titles of the good music. You reminded me of my dear Grandparent. They loved dancing. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Sir! It's a grim choice I write about here, but I'm glad to have brought you a happy mem.. read more
This is truly excellent writing, your cadence had me, the 1st and 3rd stanzas are indeed very fine.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am going to imagine this couple doing the Lindy hop, jitterbug and disco throughout their lives together and now it is the final waltz...it's always nice to have a partner as we dance through this life. Great writing and you have given us a sad, yet romantic glimpse of one couple's swan song.. cheers, jude

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

2 Years Ago

Sorry, I was away for a lengthy time, but I want to thank you for your kind review!
Unexpected ... At first it was like a dream of love, so quite. Then it all turned into darkness and I could see why the couple wasn't smiling.
What a great story ! Thank you

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. K. Beach

3 Years Ago

Darkness or release? I guess it depends on your perspective. I know I don't know the answers, but it.. read more
Mélania Woolf

3 Years Ago

True! It depends on the way we see it !
It's a brilliant piece of work !I'll be waiting for y.. read more

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