Losing Touch

Losing Touch

A Poem by Petar Oklobdzija

The beginning doesn’t seem so long gone,

the touch you lost seems to linger on.

“One minute born,

one minute doomed.”

 

What do you remember?

Is it the adventures,

the trips you shared?

Or is it the smile you miss,

the endless sky of those pale blue eyes?

 

You remember it all,

the trip there,

the smile here,

her eyes,

always.

 

Alone now,

no direction to follow,

go, journey;

“into the light

of that dark black

night.”


© 2017 Petar Oklobdzija



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i used stay locked up a lot cause 'introvert issues'
but recently i decided to come out of my shell and explore
everything i do is spontaneous. i live to make memories now. this poem reminds me of my time in London. i wouldnt think, id just 'do'
i ended up in one city to another in a blink and meet lots of cool people. all of whom have come a part of my not so faded memory. memory is sometimes our friend and sometimes foe. it makes us remember times we cherished and time we want forgotten. i personally choose to make memory a friend. learn from the mistakes and regrets ive caused. actually this reminds me of this episode from the show ' black mirror'
people had chips in their minds in which they recorded all memories made and replayed those memories. this was a really wonderful poem to read

Posted 3 Months Ago


people come, people go, memories fade into the scenery. I hope you had a safe journey 'into the light of that dark black night' and came out feeling refreshed and ready to have more adventures. This poem was lovely to read.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

thank you for the read!
Life is fair. We will miss things we cannot have no-more.
"What do you remember?
Is it the adventures,
the trips you shared?
Or is it the smile you miss,
the endless sky of those pale blue eyes?"
I did like the above lines. Realistic words and thoughts. Thank you Petar for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

thank you for the kind words
Coyote Poetry

4 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
The memories of love that are so delicate and yet so strong. This made me remember with something akin to pleasure. A lovely read. With a lovely quote to end.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

thank you sir
Ever been, ever will be. Past loves live in our bones, forevermore a part of us. Excellent!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

thank you!
in some cases i remember all, in some i try to remember none...but the memories stay and imprint themselves...

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

i like it, thank you
A beautiful sadness... it seems indeed that one minute we're born and the next, we're doomed. Powerful theme. Lovely done dear author :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

thank you!
A Beatles fan? A very powerful and emotional look into the great beyond and the quote from Blackbird added a dramatic impact to the finish making it unforgettable. Standing Ovation! I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

i most certainly am. Thank you!
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Zoe
Ahh, a bittersweet piece with emotions pouring out...well structured. The last line, wherever you quoted that from, seems a perfect fit for your piece. Nicely done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Petar Oklobdzija

4 Months Ago

Its from the song Blackbird by the Beatles. But thank you for the read and kind words!
Zoe

4 Months Ago

Ohh. My pleasure!

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