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A Poem by Asante

How do we sew up
disconnections of worth?

As I dust through
poets combed in
tailor-fit words,
like panoramas of
the boats adrift
in photograph worlds,
I cloak the dusk in nouns
and verbs
that hint at my being lost;

tough talk
from a ray of light
muffled in fog;
guitar strings
sans the youth to stand
on any a note,
I'm growing dim
but awful giggly
beneath the morose,

Morse code for millennial madness,
perhaps?

© 2017 Asante



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Asante
Just thoughts in stream.

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The combinations of words such as "awful & giggly," "growing & dim," "tough & muffled," etc. make the poem so rich and sharp.
My understanding of the second stanza was that many people write template type of poetry, and in both second and third stanzas you express a feeling of being lost. In general, seems that people become more robot-like. Maybe my interpretation was not what you intended, but I'd love to know. Excellent piece.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

7 Months Ago

Nah, you hit it right on the head. That was exactly what I shot for -- you caught the essence of the.. read more



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Just one word for it - “WOW” !

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I did like this one.
"Morse code for millennial madness,
perhaps?"
Is there a Morse code for madness? Thank you Asante for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The combinations of words such as "awful & giggly," "growing & dim," "tough & muffled," etc. make the poem so rich and sharp.
My understanding of the second stanza was that many people write template type of poetry, and in both second and third stanzas you express a feeling of being lost. In general, seems that people become more robot-like. Maybe my interpretation was not what you intended, but I'd love to know. Excellent piece.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

7 Months Ago

Nah, you hit it right on the head. That was exactly what I shot for -- you caught the essence of the.. read more
superb one.
an intriguing one.
also a commendable one.
wow!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really loved the ending line: "Morse code for millennial madness, perhaps?" that one really struck a chord for me. The only thing I would suggest is that the line: "that hint at my being lost" feels a little bit too long when it's being compared to the other shorter, more urgent lines in the poem, it's not necessarily a criticsm but I'd recommend maybe figuring out a way to rephrase it if you want to!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

8 Months Ago

Thank you for your take on this, Asya! I appreciate it.
You weave so cleverly the words to find the meaning of lifes challenges, you have a unique style of expression... love it !

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Thanks, Jeebs. :)
And so the quest of internal wandering brings saneness to a pinnacle, your writing is always challenging to the reader, never lose that edge, you are unique and your poetry has such profundity :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

I refuse to lose that of myself. I'd sooner put the pen down for good, genuinely.

Ble.. read more
You seemed to capture the many different things that can run through the imagination at once its a beautiful piece good job :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Hey, thanks a lot! I appreciate it.
Our colours lose their lustre from time to time, I like to think that those moments of disconnect are often about creating new hues. Making our canvas richer layered in character! Almost a cleansing of sorts, re emerging crisp and bright. It's an artists truth I'm certain of this, we are each beings of re birth again and again, I strongly believe that. I see this emerging attitude in your writings. Your description of writing "I cloak the dusk in nouns
and verbs..." perfectly illustrates the journey. Lost but found in a sense.

I love your application of "morose" a splendid word encapsulates the mood, that can so often drive our art and fuel our fire. Beautiful stream my man. Love ya bro. R xo

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Beautiful words that'll sit with me for a bit, sis. Words of the wise, truthfully told. Thanks a lot.. read more
"As I dust through
poets combed in
tailor-fit words,
like panoramas of
the boats adrift
in photograph worlds," Lovely words! Magical!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Thank you, always, G!

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