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A Poem by Asante

How do we sew up
disconnections of worth?

As I dust through
poets combed in
tailor-fit words,
like panoramas of
the boats adrift
in photograph worlds,
I cloak the dusk in nouns
and verbs
that hint at my being lost;

tough talk
from a ray of light
muffled in fog;
guitar strings
sans the youth to stand
on any a note,
I'm growing dim
but awful giggly
beneath the morose,

Morse code for millennial madness,
perhaps?

© 2017 Asante



Author's Note

Asante
Just thoughts in stream.

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The combinations of words such as "awful & giggly," "growing & dim," "tough & muffled," etc. make the poem so rich and sharp.
My understanding of the second stanza was that many people write template type of poetry, and in both second and third stanzas you express a feeling of being lost. In general, seems that people become more robot-like. Maybe my interpretation was not what you intended, but I'd love to know. Excellent piece.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

7 Months Ago

Nah, you hit it right on the head. That was exactly what I shot for -- you caught the essence of the.. read more



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This is awesome. A very authentic question or dilemma sometimes we all face when that cloud is present. On bright clear sky no rainbow is seen.But that is very rare for artists.
It is the state, the the outer and the inner that brings the situation. And we all surely be in such situation at some point, or may be most of the time.
I like your using the broken rainbow, the ray of light muffled in the fog to bring out the state.
What amazes me is the way you bring it out, add your color and present the picture of that broken umbrella in your uniqueness "I am growing dim....... madness, perhaps?" and that is what makes you so unique.
Always be and inspire us like this with your work. All your writes are such a pleasure to read and I get flown away in that flow and beauty. Thank you for sharing.



Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

I enjoy your viewpoints, Bala. They're always carefully picked from the crop, but well-painted.
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Excellent thoughts :)
It flows really well...my brain does this when I go to sleep at night lol

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Haha, if only you could capture some of those "right before sleep" thoughts on paper!

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Jamey

9 Months Ago

Believe me I've tried haha..you are most welcome
Broken Rainbow.I loved it! The title caught my attention and the poem is great as well.Thank you for sharing :)!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Glad you enjoyed. :)
Thank you, friend.
And what a very well worded and woven stream. Especially morose caught my eye, it has a special vibe, it sounds good to my mind's ear apart from its actual meaning but fitting looking back at the common questioning thread of your poem. To me, morose also has a feeling of rotting and decay like the decrease of one's brightness and colors.
I think I've often asked myself similar questions... It's the lost and brokenness which adds to the artfulness of our beings, it shines from us like glossy mold. Every crack of our smooth surface emphasizes our essence in more intense ways. Lucky are we, the ones who can create upon it. "I cloak the dusk in nouns and verbs that hint at my being lost", such a lovely and very relatable way to reflect writing, to me mentioning dusk reflects the urge to write, something similar to when the curtain closes you're nothing more but yourself again, and I believe we're closest to the innerst of ourselves when we create. The most honest form of being, unraveling in front of you or exposing itself. I love your vivid imagery again, alternating between realistic and abstract impressions. I think when it comes to images and creating them or on their basis, we seem very alike. Always nice to see yourself reflected in someone else. Broken rainbow, such a lovely title perfectly mirroring your stream of thoughts. Hit me up if you need more hues (- words) for your injured rainbow or feel like dancing in the madness we so artfully instill in ourselves. Take care x

Posted 9 Months Ago


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9 Months Ago

Great things you come up with again. The superman image, yes I totally understand and agree. It is v.. read more
Asante

9 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for the props. :)

I'll say this: Creating in your own unique way isn't a.. read more
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9 Months Ago

Abs dope. ;) And I love to be in tune, with myself and also with others. I can entirely. Thanks for.. read more
You are really beginning to expand on something quite original & personal. You've begun down this line or path of writing & you are starting to really circle it all back into itself. It takes a bit of restraint to write like this. You are looking beyond a lot and focusing on something quite universal it seems.

Keep on dusking, strumming, & talking my friend.
The art & entries you create along the way are quite touching to us all.

Phoenix

& thank you for sharing this.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Beautiful insight, my man. Kind, but genuine; I appreciate both sides of the coin in that sense. I'm.. read more
PhoenixDown

9 Months Ago

Of course my man. I could write pages on the depths of your work. Especially your recent ones pert.. read more
Asante

9 Months Ago

Trust me, your commentaries are always of higher value, my man. I greatly appreciate it, genuinely. .. read more
These are what I like. Vague enough to interpret anyway the reader wants and yet with an underlying statement that says 'it's me dear poet, enjoy." So I did. Take a dip in that stream whenever you like. Good write, Asante

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Gracefully worded, Ted. I appreciate your thoughts, man. Thank you!
I like how you started with questioning and ended with questioning(hint of doubt)...
Sometimes everything seems broken...like every color of VIBGYOR has disintegrated itself...We all writers tend to have our own world of thoughts and your thoughts really helped me to have reunion with my own ones...Very well crafted, Sante..
Like this poet..I too tend to get lost in my own stream of imaginations. I felt sadness in this one. Every ray has it's own light and color..let it shine.

Very nicely done, Sante :-)


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

I'm always grateful when something of mine can bring realization to someone else, in any shape or si.. read more
Gorthi Manasvini

9 Months Ago

Broken Rainbow name itself suggested the sadness and when you mentioned disconnections of worth..it .. read more
Appropriate thought for a ray astray. And If I may, you seem carried by nature, through thin water to her own way. Mirage of morose; more so is the fact that you will not float in thin water, but poise upon the maze-like haze with your energy gifted, subsequently as a photon

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Vivid commentary, and very thought-provoking. Thank you very much for it, Alexander.
Love every line dear author :) There is something about the word ''morose'', i just love it. Keep dusting through poets, the results are fabulous :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

It really is a pretty word to say aloud; if only the meaning of it was as sunny as the saying of it... read more

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