I broke all the chains

I broke all the chains

A Poem by Rashi Jain
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This is an inspiring and motivating poem.

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       I  broke all the chains

                 -Rashi

Scared,lonely,

wanted to escape your chains.

Fear,darkness,

Its like I have never seen the light.

Tears,cries,

Its like I have shouted all my life.

Pain,lies,

its like I have never smiled.

But Today,But now,

I’m me,

not you.

But today,But now,

I’ll Smile,

not you.

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Because ,

I have broken all the chains.


Courage,Hope,

they bought new life to me.

Strength,Will,

Its like they have been in scarcity.

Love,Laugh,

I was skeered of having them.

Dreams,Aims,

I forgot how to see.

But Today,but now,

Im high,

not you.

But today, but now,

I’m admired,

Not you.

Because,

I have broken all the chains.

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Beauty,grace,

Its like I have got them back.

Love,laugh,

I’m not  more skeered of having them.

wars,fear,

they can't reach me anymore.

Only Me,

Rebuilt Me.

And today.and now,

I dance in the rain.

And today, and now,

I don’t remember all that pain.

Because,

I broke all the chains.

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© 2015 Rashi Jain



Author's Note

Rashi Jain
Please add to my imagination and let me be aware of more things that you want from the 15 years old poet.

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I'm totally amazed at how interesting & varied & true-to-life & vivid your writing is. Thanks for the friend request . . . usually I don't accept new writers until they have a body of work that can sustain regular reading & reviewing . . . but your work is so stunning, I'm glad to be reminded to return so I can read more of you. I like that you use a variety of poetic structures. This one, in particular, is so interesting the way it straddles being a regular form & also being free form, a nice blend. I like when it rhymes & it's fine when it doesn't. I like the repeating structure thru-out, with slight variations. Sometimes people use too much repetition which accomplishes nothing. Here, your slightly varied refrains add emphasis and a haunting quality to the declaration: "I broke all the chains" (this is a remarkable phrase, I love it!) Very inspiring without sounding one bit preachy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

7 Months Ago

Hey.
Thank-you so much.
You make me confident.
I appreciate that💕



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Its the best and you express your imagination so well...written so beautifully... touched my heart.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Rashi Jain

7 Months Ago

Thank-you 💕
I'm totally amazed at how interesting & varied & true-to-life & vivid your writing is. Thanks for the friend request . . . usually I don't accept new writers until they have a body of work that can sustain regular reading & reviewing . . . but your work is so stunning, I'm glad to be reminded to return so I can read more of you. I like that you use a variety of poetic structures. This one, in particular, is so interesting the way it straddles being a regular form & also being free form, a nice blend. I like when it rhymes & it's fine when it doesn't. I like the repeating structure thru-out, with slight variations. Sometimes people use too much repetition which accomplishes nothing. Here, your slightly varied refrains add emphasis and a haunting quality to the declaration: "I broke all the chains" (this is a remarkable phrase, I love it!) Very inspiring without sounding one bit preachy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

7 Months Ago

Hey.
Thank-you so much.
You make me confident.
I appreciate that💕
I was happy at the end of the first verse. I think that might have been enough for the whole poem. When you have conveyed the feeling you want...its a good place to stop. Just saying sometimes less is more. Enjoyed ( : O )

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

7 Months Ago

Thank-you.
I'm glad that this poem fulfilled your expectations 💕
Don't worry about that little child girl he's a little ten year old a fowl little child your work is magnificent so boo on him just flag and blocked him 😊

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

1 Year Ago

Thankyou so much
Prodigious work. Much kudos to you!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Years Ago

Thank-you Ayushi.
This is indeed very inspirational and empowering. Enemies or our conflicting feelings can reign over us for so long, but we are strong enough to pull out from their power.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rashi Jain

2 Years Ago

True.Thank-you :)
You did very well young Poet. The poem filled with emotions and thoughts. Braking the chains are hard to do. Many kinds of chains. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rashi Jain

2 Years Ago

Thank-you so much
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Very well done, the rhythm is lovely and fits the poems theme really well, it's a gentle yet powerful poem, full of feeling and makes a very valid point, that no matter what happens love, hope, dreams and so much more is still waiting for you to break your chains, love it X keep up the good work!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rashi Jain

2 Years Ago

Thank-you so much
I felt the sentiments, the emotions which were subtly powerful. One spelling of skeered, the correction is "scared".

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Years Ago

Thank-you so much. Skeered is a synonym of scared. :)

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