from the muse

from the muse

A Poem by recantichize

i was the muse,
his muse.
i inspired the songs,
the words were to me. 
but what indeed did i impress?
did i bring him love?
sweet words to fill 
a wanting heart and pour 
from tender lips?
did i awaken the ardor
that had then yet been
unactualized hopes and
the desire of dreams?
did i give him the hope
to reach beyond the world's end,
and deeper yet, the souls depths,
with my gifts?
or 
did i conjure the tears
that stained the pages
on which he wrote
our words and lives?
was i the one
that smashed the heart vessel
from which now drain
the ifs and could-have-beens?
did i light the spark
which when left burning unattended
scorched the once fertile soulscape,
leaving but the smoke of once.
i was that muse,
his muse.


© 2012 recantichize



Author's Note

recantichize
this was an attempt to rewrite a poem that my computer deleted. i will probably be making some revisions.

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It's hard when you lose things digitally. But in rewriting works from memory, you end up with what was most memorable and it's distilled to it's purest form which sometimes inspires lines previously unwritten.
This piece flows smoothly, confidently in it's expression. All good questions.



Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I feel this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is just excellent. It flawlessly and fully describes the all important Muse....

Posted 5 Years Ago


Revisions or not, an excellent piece. You're a deep thinker and I envy you for having such a great gift. I'll be reading more in the future.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it happens that we have bittersweet memories as well as bitter memories filled with regret. you must have inspired him with your love to write songs especially for you. sometimes when you're with a musician you'll have a tempestuous relationship that ends in a bad way. it sounds like you blame yourself for his broken heart, but perhaps that was as far as the two of you could make it. great poem. very heartfelt. the emotion really comes through.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Other than the odd one or two grammatical errors, I feel no revision is necessary. It's a great poem with some really nice lines. Sometimes, revising work makes you lose that special spark that helped to create it. By all means, correct the grammar but don't revise the words or their meaning - they are as they should be - well written and very meaningful. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Oh for a muse of fire? From this piece it would seem 'he' had it - and then... it was forsaken. How foolish of 'him.' I feel you may want to express more, not a revision as such, I feel you have more to say on this, perhaps that is it? Still. I understand the emotion between the lines. Thank you.
Rosa -x-

Posted 5 Years Ago


he is really lucky to have such a muse. i think he must be so much inspired. i am sure you made poems run from him like water running in a river. you have drown many wonderful images while mentioning your inquiries. the flow is great that you picked the best words suitable for the feeling. great work

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emotionally strong and a pleasure to read...the muse is a familiar word to me.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Oh... oh... revisions?... no... beautiful as is, in my opinion.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it is the ultimate delight to flicker in the imagination as the muse..lovely write

Posted 5 Years Ago



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