from the muse

i was the muse,

his muse.

i inspired the songs,

the words were to me. 

but what indeed did i impress?

did i bring him love?

sweet words to fill 

a wanting heart and pour 

from tender lips?

did i awaken the ardor

that had then yet been

unactualized hopes and

the desire of dreams?

did i give him the hope

to reach beyond the world's end,

and deeper yet, the souls depths,

with my gifts?

or 

did i conjure the tears

that stained the pages

on which he wrote

our words and lives?

was i the one

that smashed the heart vessel

from which now drain

the ifs and could-have-beens?

did i light the spark

which when left burning unattended

scorched the once fertile soulscape,

leaving but the smoke of once.

i was that muse,

his muse.

Reviews

[roarke]

It's hard when you lose things digitally. But in rewriting works from memory, you end up with what was most memorable and it's distilled to it's purest form which sometimes inspires lines previously unwritten.
This piece flows smoothly, confidently in it's expression. All good questions.

[Rusty]

I feel this.

[Kyle]

This is just excellent. It flawlessly and fully describes the all important Muse....

[.]

Revisions or not, an excellent piece. You're a deep thinker and I envy you for having such a great gift. I'll be reading more in the future.

[Mockingbird]

it happens that we have bittersweet memories as well as bitter memories filled with regret. you must have inspired him with your love to write songs especially for you. sometimes when you're with a musician you'll have a tempestuous relationship that ends in a bad way. it sounds like you blame yourself for his broken heart, but perhaps that was as far as the two of you could make it. great poem. very heartfelt. the emotion really comes through.

[Cathy Wattam]

Other than the odd one or two grammatical errors, I feel no revision is necessary. It's a great poem with some really nice lines. Sometimes, revising work makes you lose that special spark that helped to create it. By all means, correct the grammar but don't revise the words or their meaning - they are as they should be - well written and very meaningful. Well done.

[^]

Oh for a muse of fire? From this piece it would seem 'he' had it - and then... it was forsaken. How foolish of 'him.' I feel you may want to express more, not a revision as such, I feel you have more to say on this, perhaps that is it? Still. I understand the emotion between the lines. Thank you.
Rosa -x-

[khalid]

he is really lucky to have such a muse. i think he must be so much inspired. i am sure you made poems run from him like water running in a river. you have drown many wonderful images while mentioning your inquiries. the flow is great that you picked the best words suitable for the feeling. great work

[P.J.]

emotionally strong and a pleasure to read...the muse is a familiar word to me.

[Mama Topaz]

Oh... oh... revisions?... no... beautiful as is, in my opinion.

[ghost writer]

it is the ultimate delight to flicker in the imagination as the muse..lovely write