"FAITH"

"FAITH"

A Poem by richieb
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A 50's style beat poem

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       Rawboned negro men, patriarchs, fishing the narrow
           bend of the riverbanks.
           Slouched hats, covering sad yellow eyes
            White fuzz claiming their chins.

             Light rippling eddy's crowd up the shore
              Brown muddy foam slides and traces back.
             Silent passages flow deep into the channels
             Burying the scars and tears of stolen lives.

             The tempest fury of the auctioneer's commands
             The striking hammer of the gavel
             Blown far past the driftwood, seeking refuge
             in the infinite darkness of ancient sins.

            The evil slashing of the cracking whip of mad men
             driving fear and retribution.
            "Let the flesh bleed, I want his soul."
            Angels shudder, remembering his curse.

           Fresh born blossoms dress the spring,
           Honey fragrance blends with blissful praising.
           The unshackled joyfully shout the blessings
           of Abraham and Moses.

           Eternal days of toil and weariness dry up
           and roll away.
          Pharaoh's bones turn to dust.
           Yes Jesus, Sweet Lamb, Hallelujah! our Savior

          The venerable fisherman's long fingers caress
          his pole.
          His wrist snaps and sends the line deep into
          the river.

         A slight tug and the line straightens.
         The old negro smile's, Amen, Amen.
         A cool breeze stirs his soul.
         Thank you Jesus, thank you Lord.
         

            
         

© 2017 richieb



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"FAITH"
richieb,
I see the passage of time within this river of experiences. Each stage builds into the next. We as people have this same experience: pain, heartache, trauma, loss.
The beauty of this group of thoughts was that the inner ember of who we are as people wants to somehow survive but humanity can become damaged and shattered. You brought the light of an eternal God into the picture and this was what turned this piece into one of hope and victory.
The situation may not change but Jesus is the place of strength and hope but mostly eternal salvation and true peace.
Kathy

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

2 Months Ago

Kathy,
I have been trying to reach you but my computer has been acting up. I want to .. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

2 Months Ago

Richib,
Yes, I see a line of history between the experience of bondage of man, both spiritual.. read more



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This is wonderfully written. I had to read it twice and thanks.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

2 Months Ago

Roxane,
Thank you for your comments. I feel deeply about soc.. read more
"FAITH"
richieb,
I see the passage of time within this river of experiences. Each stage builds into the next. We as people have this same experience: pain, heartache, trauma, loss.
The beauty of this group of thoughts was that the inner ember of who we are as people wants to somehow survive but humanity can become damaged and shattered. You brought the light of an eternal God into the picture and this was what turned this piece into one of hope and victory.
The situation may not change but Jesus is the place of strength and hope but mostly eternal salvation and true peace.
Kathy

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

2 Months Ago

Kathy,
I have been trying to reach you but my computer has been acting up. I want to .. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

2 Months Ago

Richib,
Yes, I see a line of history between the experience of bondage of man, both spiritual.. read more
Wow! Intense and evocative of toil and suffering of a cursed past. The atrocities that men do to their brother men. Merciless and brutal. Well- written with vivid imagery. Powerful. God saves.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you Annette for a powerful review. I appreciate your strong words. God does sa.. read more
Aloha richieb, deeply Inspiring read!
As the poem built in intensity it definitely felt like a thundering heartbeat to me. I am not familiar with this style but I enjoyed this very much.
I liked the opening line, like a intro to a blues song with slide guitar and harp.
I love how you wrap this up with the humble yet peaceful image of the fisherman grateful for his catch and content for a while. Incredible poem. Izzy

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you Izzy for your kind words. You are a great reviewer and I appreciate you reading .. read more
Island Hippy

7 Months Ago

You're very welcome.
some are just grateful for all they have and don't dwell on what they don't...

i picture this fisherman fishing where others don't...maybe fishing for Carp---a fish many won't eat, yet it is actually pretty tasty...he gets what he can, and is happy with what he has...
he knows things are still a long way from where they should be...but he is optimistic about his life...and knows it is better than what it could have been, even if it has a long way to go.

Posted 7 Months Ago


richieb

7 Months Ago

Jacob,
Thank you for a very thoughtful review. I always respect your thoughts an.. read more
I feel the beat RichieB! :)
This makes me feel up beat and happy!
Keep it up :))

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you.
Richie b.
Mr.Writer

7 Months Ago

No problem :)
Sorry it took me awhile to get back into things on this website . . . thanks for giving me the heads-up about this great poem. This sounds quite professional, the imagery & word choices are so powerful. I like the way the intensity starts out low, then it has a crescendo in the middle, then the ending is less intense again with a great final stanza expressing gratitude despite the ups & downs of life, as symbolized by the various imagery you've described so lusciously. This feels exactly like the bygone era you're describing. Great job! I've missed reading you! (((HUGS)))

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

8 Months Ago

Barleygirl,
You made my day by hearing from you. I say a prayer for.. read more
barleygirl

7 Months Ago

You are such a sweetheart (((HUGS))) . . . thanks for the prayers, I know they help me push past the.. read more
Wow I lived the emphasis placed in this poem and I remember from somewhere that a statue of " negros men... fishing the narrow" meant a safe place for slaves

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you Angel for your review. I find it exciting and interesting about the "fishing.. read more
Writing Angel

9 Months Ago

Thank you for writing it
This is an extremely evocative and poignant piece. I could envision everything as I read. The highlight of this piece, in my opinion, is how it feels somewhat fragmented yet makes sense at the same time. The details are a little scattered, quickly shifting from one scene to another, but there is still an overall sense of coherence ... you leave the reader with just enough space to fill in some of the gaps. I think this feel fits the theme quite well in that it helps capture pain and the mindset that can come along with it. You've done great with this piece.

- William Liston

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you William for a through and constructive review. I know I covered a lot of ter.. read more
Wow! This is one powerful piece of writing and I am not amplifying the effect it has had on my mind. I don't know if this was the intended effect but it works on two levels for me. One which shows the ardor that goes behind intense manual labor like this and the other which piquantly points out the power of hegemony on the native mind.

Take a bow!

Best,
M.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you Mallika for the encouraging review. I am most happy that the poem touched you w.. read more

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I am a steelworker with 34 years experience looking forward to retirement in 3years. I want to start writing short stories and maybe try a novel. want to be part of a writing group that offers suppor.. more..

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