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Batman

Batman

A Poem by RiverRei

Deep in the woods there once was a man -
saving animals - doing all he can.
He would sleep during the day,
but at night he would play.
He hid in trees, and thought he was batman.

© 2015 RiverRei



Author's Note

RiverRei
This is my first attempt at a limerick so be harsh so I can improve with my next attempt :)

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Not bad.. not bad at all :)

Deep in the city you'll find a girl;
Who wrote a poem each day of April.
Most were quite nice,
But all a great write!
My favorite one would be Sister Dear.

( but don't tell her that I haven't read all of them yet:-)



Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

EGTen you are the sweetest person in the world, I cannot believe you just wrote a poem for me! That .. read more
E G TEN

2 Years Ago

Oh hush, its just a silly limerick, and I don't even think the AAA's rhymed properly,, but if your .. read more
RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Awesome, I can't wait to read it :)



Reviews

It feels a little off.. Especially the last line. You seem to be missing a beat by saying "Batman"
You have the rhyme scheme right though :)

Ba ba biddy ba ba
Ba ba biddy ba ba
Ba ba ba ba ba
Ba ba ba ba ba
Ba ba biddy ba ba

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I agree, this is my first attempt at a limerick and I really wanted to use Batman so I just left it .. read more
Batman is a interesting man. Nice short tale in the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent tale.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much CP :) Good to hear from you again!
Good attempt, I love reading limericks. Always make me sing all of them.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I know what you mean, I can't help saying it to the rhythm of a nursery rhyme :)
This is your first attempt at a limerick and then I have just read your second and its like you have assimilated the format and style of in just one day - WOW!
This has the makings of a limerick - its not quite there...yet - I love the wit (a characteristic of the best limericks)

I always write limericks with a beat in my head - thus (commas are just to aid readability)
la da da, da da da, da da
la da da, da da da, da da

la da da, da de
la da da, da de

la da da, da da da, da da

There lives in the woods, an old man
to save animals; does all he can
He sleeps during the day,
but at night he will play.
He thinks, in the trees, he's Batman

I just rewrote to illustrate the beat my friend -
:))


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I like it :) Thank you for helping :D I don't like the beat portion, I can't seem to get that quite .. read more
A very funny poem
Some people truly believe they are super heros

But i am a fan of believing in goodness
If you believe hard enough

Your thoughts can transform the world ..... can create so much beauty

just close your eyes and squeeze your hands in and believe

just like we once did when we were five lol

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I completely agree, Nisreenaa :) Goodness can make a difference! Thank you for the lovely review :D
Don't know much about limericks, but this one I like. Very well done, RiverRei. :) Rudi

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Rudi :) I didn't know either until I saw a contest about it. Then I didn't get the courage to.. read more
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you got my attention with the title. I am a BIG FAN of BATMAN!!! :) great limeric! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Me too! I was really excited to be able to use it in a poem/limerick lol. Thanks for the review!
It is wonderful Riverrie. Short and neat.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Terrence, I'm glad you liked it :D
Jan said it all.. good first attempt... I may have to try this form some day :) Good work I liked it

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Aaron! I was really excited to use Batman in a poem lmao
Well done my friend, you are showing range in your writing:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you Jamestown :) I like the style I've used throughout the years, but I do think a good writer.. read more

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