A Diamond Rose

A Diamond Rose

A Poem by R.E. Ray

She glistens alone 

in my mystical garden,

colorless crystal

in winter moonlight...

A rough solitaire, 

beautiful and strong...

weathers all seasons,

winds and storms.

 

The hardiest perennial 

under the stars;

her pretty rarity 

beckons my approach.

“Come close, admire, 

inquire, trust...

Step forward, 

reach out...

dare touch!”

 

A thornless rose, 

a supernatural wonder?

And her smooth, 

deceptively pretty petals,

no man’s hands 

warm, shape

or harm...

cut steel

and slash 

armored heart.

 

Alone, she stands 

dazzling, dawn to dusk,

Red only with my blood...

my diamond rose.

 

 


© 2018 R.E. Ray


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Beautifully done, enjoyed :) x

Posted 1 Year Ago


that was an amazing piece of writing i really do like people that write story's that are meaningful

THANK YOU:)

~golden dooky

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much for your review!
...the aloof lover always just out of reach and maybe for good reason. :) This poem is graceful the images are powerful and I enjoyed the read very much.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Cherrie, thank you for reading this poem, too. I appreciate your time and kind review.
I just wonder if she is thornless.
Certainly not one to get close to.
But I'm sure many a man has tried and failed.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Good points, Paul. As for now, I hope she remains in words only. Thanks for the read. Much apprec.. read more
Beautiful and I believe she does exist, just must be found🌹

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Thanks much! I appreciate the read and your remarks.
Overall I think it is a vivid and profound metaphor for a bedazzling but emotionally dangerous woman. I'm not sure about the second line in the third stanza though.

If someone was said to be deceptively fast that would mean they're faster than they look wouldn't it. 'Deceptively pretty petals' sounds like you mean her petals are prettier than they appear to be, which doesn't make sense. I know the following lines explain what you actually mean by 'deceptively pretty petals’ and some of the earlier lines give hints but for me those three words ‘deceptively pretty petals’ were like a jarring pothole in an otherwise smooth journey because they aren't self explanatory.

You could say something like ‘her smooth, pretty petals lie’, or her smooth pretty petals are as deceptive as (insert metaphor here). If you agree with my suggestion I’m sure you’ll find a creative means of editing.





Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Thank you for taking time to read this poem. As with your others, I appreciate the depth of your re.. read more
Ferociously lovely.
An eye-bleeding read!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Jimmy, for another read and your always original comments. Much appreciated!
Wow, very descriptive write and imagery.
A very beautiful write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

Thank you. I appreciate the kind review.

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Added on December 31, 2017
Last Updated on April 29, 2018
Tags: diamonds, roses, women, men, relationships, love, hardship, deception, strength, resilience, free verse, poetry, poem


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