A Diamond Rose

A Diamond Rose

A Poem by Robert Ray


She glistens alone 

in my mystical garden,

colorless crystal

in winter moonlight...

A rough solitaire, 

beautiful and strong...

weathers all seasons,

all winds, all storms.

 

The hardiest perennial 

under the stars;

her pretty rarity 

beckons my approach.

“Come close, admire, 

inquire and trust...

Step forward, 

reach out...

dare touch!”

 

A thornless rose, 

a supernatural wonder?

And her smooth, 

deceptively pretty petals;

no man’s hands 

can warm, shape

... or harm.

She cuts steel

and slashes 

armored heart.

 

She stands alone, 

dazzling, dawn to dusk,

Red only with my blood...

my diamond rose.

 


© 2018 Robert Ray



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Ooh, this is a beautiful romantic piece! I just love that she is both a rose and a diamond.. I love the brilliance of her strength. Also, despite her solitary independence, she still beckons to come close, "inquire/admire" Love that! Beauty in both roses and diamonds, but you have delicate, alluring, fragile femininity in a rose contrasted with the hard, smooth, cutting, strength of a diamond.. rarity... purity... I just love all the aspects and descriptions that came together in your piece here. As always, great writing Robert!

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Robert Ray

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Thank you again! I do appreciate taking time to read and write such extensive reviews.



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that was an amazing piece of writing i really do like people that write story's that are meaningful

THANK YOU:)

~golden dooky

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Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks very much for your review!
...the aloof lover always just out of reach and maybe for good reason. :) This poem is graceful the images are powerful and I enjoyed the read very much.

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Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Cherrie, thank you for reading this poem, too. I appreciate your time and kind review.
I just wonder if she is thornless.
Certainly not one to get close to.
But I'm sure many a man has tried and failed.


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Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Good points, Paul. As for now, I hope she remains in words only. Thanks for the read. Much apprec.. read more
Ooh, this is a beautiful romantic piece! I just love that she is both a rose and a diamond.. I love the brilliance of her strength. Also, despite her solitary independence, she still beckons to come close, "inquire/admire" Love that! Beauty in both roses and diamonds, but you have delicate, alluring, fragile femininity in a rose contrasted with the hard, smooth, cutting, strength of a diamond.. rarity... purity... I just love all the aspects and descriptions that came together in your piece here. As always, great writing Robert!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Thank you again! I do appreciate taking time to read and write such extensive reviews.
Beautiful and I believe she does exist, just must be found🌹

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Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Thanks much! I appreciate the read and your remarks.
Overall I think it is a vivid and profound metaphor for a bedazzling but emotionally dangerous woman. I'm not sure about the second line in the third stanza though.

If someone was said to be deceptively fast that would mean they're faster than they look wouldn't it. 'Deceptively pretty petals' sounds like you mean her petals are prettier than they appear to be, which doesn't make sense. I know the following lines explain what you actually mean by 'deceptively pretty petals’ and some of the earlier lines give hints but for me those three words ‘deceptively pretty petals’ were like a jarring pothole in an otherwise smooth journey because they aren't self explanatory.

You could say something like ‘her smooth, pretty petals lie’, or her smooth pretty petals are as deceptive as (insert metaphor here). If you agree with my suggestion I’m sure you’ll find a creative means of editing.





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Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Thank you for taking time to read this poem. As with your others, I appreciate the depth of your re.. read more
Ferociously lovely.
An eye-bleeding read!

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Robert Ray

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Jimmy, for another read and your always original comments. Much appreciated!
Speaks to me of the one we admire from afar. So beautiful. So mysterious. Are they wonderful or dangerous? Both?
Is it better to admire and fantasize from afar or risk hurt or pain and get close. Are they still as beautiful once we are close?
My favorite.

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Wow, very descriptive write and imagery.
A very beautiful write.

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Robert Ray

3 Months Ago

Thank you. I appreciate the kind review.
Such a romantic write. A thornless rose....though I doubt such a being exists in the human realm. We all have a couple thorns! Beautifully written. Lydi**

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Robert Ray

3 Months Ago

Lydia, thank you for reading and your kind review. Great to hear from you.

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