Hissing Water

Don't leave me.

Restless lights

tremble on and off.

Sanity bent and brown,

submissive living.

Drying clothes

tumbling around

and around

and around.

You are like a fire

that has been extinguished.

Glowing memory.

Hissing water.

Failing assassin

that kills the

wrong ambition.

Under wheels of

rolling indifference,

winter, spring, summer

and fall.

Succumbing to the

blaring ending.

Under sheets once white

and now

tattered and forgotten.

Reviews

[Mary Chalmer]

I love the smooth flow - -- A compelling read

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

very nice poem kept me on edge

[Guilt]

This is economic poetry. Your skill is evident in your use of metaphors, and the pace of every line. A perfect construct for the idea. Glad to have stumbled upon you! :D

You've obviously got a foundation of experience in writing under you. I enjoyed the hiss!

- Guilt

[Myra Andrews]

Love the concept!

[yusuf]

I Loved the words ``Hissing water``. Very intriguing indeed.

[spiritwind]

You make my mind come awake and take my heart and soul by hand and walk through foreign territory... always read your poetry several several times and am enriched each time. You are a subterranean dweller and your words seep into my world... excellent

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine poem with loads of great lines, the alliteration of bent and brown, the clever well observed images of washing, of water and fire, and I really like the way Chris works this image through to the last verse, with white sheets. An excellent, thoughtful poem.

[quinfinn]

i think this is one of the more metaphorically descriptive of your writes which i have read in recent weeks, it certainly carries your unique brand of imagery and entreats the reader to an imagination in overdrive. awesome write here, Chris. thank you for sharing.

[Scottlehem]

I like the prospective of heat and the blare as Chris projects his work in a sequence; while the subtitle hangs onto life as tragic as it is. Thank-you for sharing it!

[Loner]

Great depth and imagination put together
Enjoyed reading it......