A not so ordinary girl

A not so ordinary girl

A Story by Airafh


A not so ordinary girl fell in love with a not so ordinary guy

She was madly in love with him and he was with her

She spoke endlessly about him,

about how he made her feel good and how he made her look beautiful;

How he made her feel special and how he loved her and how she loved him back

She spoke endlessly about how good hearted he was, about how caring he was

About how he pulled her out from the shackles which she herself couldn't possibly come out from.

Her face glowed, her eyes sparkled and her smile spread across her face when she spoke of him

She genuinely loved him and I bet she could do anything to be with him, had he stayed.

She blushed by his very name and thought of no one else;

She spoke endlessly about how he treated her like a Princess

And always pampered her

She spoke about how he loved her complexion and how much she loved his

Now, the ordinary guy was the one who listened endlessly to the not so ordinary girl

Observing her very closely, the very little creases of the skin in her face when she spoke

Her sharp dancing eyebrows

Her smile returning after every few seconds

And those beautiful velvety hair who had already swept the ordinary guy from his feet long before.

He was amazed by her glowing face even though it did only for the not so ordinary guy

He was captivated by those sparkling eyes even though it did only for the not so ordinary guy

And he was spellbound by that recurring smile spread across her face even though it appeared

Only with the name of the not so ordinary guy………

© 2019 Airafh


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You have a great way of thinking about life & then translating your ideas into a story-poem. Your lines are well-expressed with simplicity & clarity. A few phrases could be pumped up a little, avoiding over-used expressions such as: "he made her look beautiful" -- this could be said with a more sensory approach . . . show me: what is "beautiful"? . . . a word so over-used it means nothing anymore. It would be great for you to SHOW: how does it look? how does it smell? how does it sound? Bringing the sensory element more into your writing could go well with your excellent delivery of thoughts & ideas (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Airafh

1 Year Ago

I really appreciate your comments they are always genuine and with love. I will try to bring the sen.. read more



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Cause love is no flower that'll rot and no journey that'll end... Love's immoral that resides in lives forever...
May the sweet chirping girl and guy stay together...be it in your mind or reality!
Great write👊

Posted 1 Year Ago


You have a great way of thinking about life & then translating your ideas into a story-poem. Your lines are well-expressed with simplicity & clarity. A few phrases could be pumped up a little, avoiding over-used expressions such as: "he made her look beautiful" -- this could be said with a more sensory approach . . . show me: what is "beautiful"? . . . a word so over-used it means nothing anymore. It would be great for you to SHOW: how does it look? how does it smell? how does it sound? Bringing the sensory element more into your writing could go well with your excellent delivery of thoughts & ideas (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Airafh

1 Year Ago

I really appreciate your comments they are always genuine and with love. I will try to bring the sen.. read more
Very descriptive and detailed in this romantic encounter as if the narrator was there or might be him in the action. You write beautifully sir.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Airafh

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Sir for your kind words
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome.

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Airafh
Airafh

Mumbai, India



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