Not Enough Time

Not Enough Time

A Poem by Dave Brown
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cracked things

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There’s not enough time in the day

Thought ace detective, One-eyed Jack

But I’d better start doin sum crime solving

If this is a case I’m gunna crack

 

Then he remembered with a chuckle

‘Gunna’ caused his Mother to rage

A stickler for correct spelling and punctuation

Even at her well-advanced age

 

Ain’t would also make her explode

As would dropping the ‘g’ on any ‘ing’

She’d wack him mightily for any verbal infraction

And ‘Man,’ did that ever sting

 

But back to the business at hand

Crime seems to wait for no man

Valuable Prose had been stolen from the bookstore

It was grabbed, then off the culprit ran

 

A sleuthful Jack found it outside the store door

Where it had been carelessly tossed by a tree

A note was with it saying ,”I’m so Sorry!”

“I was really after some great Poetry!!”

 

© 2020 Dave Brown


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What a great last stanza! a bit of a surprise! I know many folks here in the NC mountains who constantly use the word "aint" and never put an "ING" on any word that needs it....I don't correct them, because that's what they hear from many generations before. I like the vivid images you used to describe Jack, a down to earth detective who gets side tracked by surprisingly finding a note alluding to poetry which interested him enough to keep it; quite the opposite of his demeanor.
A really good write, interesting with a good twist.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Dave Brown

1 Week Ago

I am of the mind, with so many people just naturally dropping the 'g' among other things, it is time.. read more
Betty Hermelee

1 Week Ago

very true!
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LJ
You made me laugh with that last stanza. Actually, most stanzas here made me smile. It's a good way to tell a story about prose and poetry. It moves right along, and there's even 'foreshadowing' - the mother who was a stickler for grammar. I like that; it set us up for the last two stanzas, which are highly amusing, and keep both rhythm and story going at a good pace.
Good work! I hope to read more by you soon.

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Dave Brown

1 Week Ago

Thanks LJ
One Eye knew it wasn't you because you are involved with both and would never throw.. read more
rashmi

1 Week Ago

Wow this is amazing!
What an ending there! Poor Prose! Stolen and then slighted. A double whammy. I relate with the thief though. I’m after great poetry. I think we all are. Good point sir. A gripping crime thriller! 😀 Loved it!

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Dave Brown

1 Week Ago

One-Eye has an uncanny ability to successfully handle these tense scenarios
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Pestonjee

1 Week Ago

Enjoyed the little twist at the end.
ah GGGG mom:/ boy did i get a lotta smacks over the head too:) but it never stopped me from using those gee's:) the great poetry will come when it wants too my friend we just have to keep tapping and tackling the keyboardg

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Dave Brown

1 Week Ago

and all the chocolate cakes more than made up for each smack

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