Torrent-tial

Torrent-tial

A Poem by Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

__Torrent-tial__

 

All that I would cede

Pleading refrain

Screams of pain

Eyes bleed

Keen

Skies bead

Abash stains

Cannot constrain

Wretched sight this deed

Weeps sorrows rain

Wash remains

Esteem

clean



© 2019 Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)


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In spite of thinking and thinking over your uniquely styled and worded poem, am sadly unsure of its intended meaning. However, can only only tell you what I feel, think: I see it as an intended apology for something done. The aftermath of a terrible mistake, regretted but hoping for forgiveness. If horribly wrong, I'm the one now apologising!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

kk I love what you see by the way the format was an attempt to express that feeling when just one wo.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

the picture is my face turned sideways looking down from the sky turning to rain
emmajoy

2 Months Ago

Re. your penultimate comment, i really should try to use just one word more often!!!

.. read more



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Another example of a fine-tuning to the minds-insanity...
Going down the crash course of sadistic similes and word-sounds...
Like only a bunny can....
I write this way pretty much all the time, so it has a huge message to me, and I find the road-signs that require another look, are the more fun ones, and almost always require a family-photo
Dannngggg wellllll doneeeeee
Did you just use "all that i would cede"
and go from there, brilliantly...?
Or was there an intended message or thought before you wrote...

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

1 Month Ago

Welp... That was a bit more intense of an answer than i was previously ready for...
Ahem...read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

1 Month Ago

One of my closest friends went thru that he had to be taught everything all over too... his frontal .. read more
Silente-Write

1 Month Ago

You like me because of the crack scientist ninjas i hired that keep you in a perma-tripping state..... read more
I felt inner turmoil here. A torrent of it. Sometimes after I have had a good cry, I feel refreshed, cleansed even. It:s like removing the cork from a bottle of fizzy drink after it has been shaken. You get an explosive reaction followed by calm. That's what you gave me here dear Bunny, with your words this morning. Have a lovely day.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

Hey hey Chris:) so true I have in many ways learned to calm the sadness but the triggers still linge.. read more

I interpret this to mean an inner storm that must hit with all its force to (hopefully) cleanse bad feelings or memories. Storms leave damage but offer an opportunity to rebuild.
Just sharing my interpretation of this piece. I could be way off. :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

Not at all! I never know if I should explain the motivation of a poem or just let it lie? But you ce.. read more
Edie Blue Starfish

2 Months Ago

Sometimes best to let it lie and let others see what they will. But totally up to you. :)
You do love to play with words, don't you? Not sure what this poem is all about, but the shape of it seems to be the shape of a woman...which leads me to believe it is about a woman. She is crying and somehow that cleanses her soul. You try to get her to stop...perhaps you are the reason she is crying to begin with? Not really sure, but I must say you certainly post thought provoking work and it is unique...which makes me enjoy it. Lydi**

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

2 Months Ago

Aha, now it makes more sense. Thanks for the explanation! Have a great weekend.
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

It is strange she has been out of my life for quite a long time but it still lingers like it was yes.. read more
Lydia

2 Months Ago

Not strange at all. Many of my poems are inspired by long ago relationships,
In spite of thinking and thinking over your uniquely styled and worded poem, am sadly unsure of its intended meaning. However, can only only tell you what I feel, think: I see it as an intended apology for something done. The aftermath of a terrible mistake, regretted but hoping for forgiveness. If horribly wrong, I'm the one now apologising!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

kk I love what you see by the way the format was an attempt to express that feeling when just one wo.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Months Ago

the picture is my face turned sideways looking down from the sky turning to rain
emmajoy

2 Months Ago

Re. your penultimate comment, i really should try to use just one word more often!!!

.. read more

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Tags: sorrow, bleeding, keening, pain, grace, survival, shame, seduction, molestation, rape

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Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

pittsburgh, PA



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Hello My Name is Robert Trakofler My nickname is Bad Bunny... I am the Bunny but the bunny isn't me long live the bunny I own an art gallery and performance space in Pittsburgh called The Zeni.. more..

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