Away Today

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Away Today

Did you see the distant dying eyes 

Looking back as scenes roll by

Of the times he smiled and cried

Watched them go and fade away

Like tiny pictures turning grey

As my mind began to fray

Away away away now

The fragments milled about the sky 

Stealing my sight my how and why

my sense of self, could not descry

as the pain began to fade 

a resignation starts to play

that I have seen my final day

away away away now

my heart still beats, upon the poetry

like the prayer beads, of a old rosary

in old planted seeds or in their future reads

your love

away away away away now

you’re here to stay now

the love surrounds you

today today today I live now

how I survived, I’ll never know

of how the fragments recombined

from my lifeless broken mind

of how I breathe on borrowed time

so I write these lines today

I hope that in my humble way

That I somehow can convey

this grateful hearts display

And I vow to share this grace

Of all the beauty in this place

In my gratitude’s embrace

Away today away today now

I’m here to stay now

© 2022 Robert Trakofler

Author's Note

Robert · Away Today

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Robert, My Dear Fine Friend 🤜✫🤛

With such grace and humbling gratitude, the timbre of your graciously skilled words dance upon the floor of my most thankful heart and soul ⁓ that you've returned, and not only returned, but with a pen filled to the brim with stardust amplitude, the likes a master's deft touch has ne'er before shown.
I can almost envision you floating in mid-air, as if your spirit has been lifted upon the wings of life, itself, conveying such beauty in poetic reverence and revelry to every breath God hath bestowed.
In my humble mind's-eye, Dear Robert, this is your magnum opus, that should be inscribed into a golden tablet and framed upon your wall for all to see.

You're lookin' fine as sparklin' wine, with a smilin' style that all the while sets hearts aglow that love you so … welcome, home, Poet Sublime … happiest brotherly HUGS! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Robert Trakofler]

This is by far the nicest review I have ever received! coming from one of the keenest poetry masters I have ever known I am flattered beyond words. Although I am not a structurist form poem writer I strongly believe you need to know the forms well before you branch out into free verse and i know nobody more gifted in this arena you are always the first writer I recommend for assistance in this as you were always so helpful with my writing endeavors early on here at the cafe:)

[Richard🖌]

Awww, My Dear Friend 🙏

Your sincere, humbling tributaries touch an olde bard's heart with deepest gratitude … I'm simply enthralled you've come back from your ethereally, unearthly sojourn.

I love being your friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Neville]

You have seriously pinned a little bit of genius to this page sir Robert .. I hereby take my hat off to you & send my regards to both you and your pen ............................. Neville :)

[Dave Brown]

the gift of life is an unequalled treasure, most especially when you had felt it slipping away.
This aging thingy could stand a recogumaciation but how wonderful you must feel surviving the unpleasant alternative
From human contact to the wonders of nature, each moment will now be even more special
Welcome back to warm welcomes, taxes and turmoil

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This poem was a pleasure to read. I like your close rhyming, it kept me hooked. Your "away away away away now" repeats really brought the lyrics into this write aswell. Nicely peened. tyfs

[Robert Trakofler]

thank you Cyprian

[Ruth]

And I am glad you are healing Robert...health is indeed a precious gift to be nurtured if we can. Wonderful writing as always, keep on healing :)

[Robert Trakofler]

thanks ruth:)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Your heart still beats on poetry and you are nothing short of a miracle, my friend. It's such a joy to visit your words again. Keep getting stronger for us all. We love you, dear Bunny ❤

[Robert Trakofler]

Hi Dhara:) now my heart beats poetry and it bleeds gratitude my dearest one

[Relic]

And now the healing begins. There are many more words and poems ahead and I'm glad there is. It's great to read your words and hear the honesty in your voice.

Great writing, Robert. :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Welcome back dear Robert-so good to see your smiling face and hear your voice here once again!
"today today today I live now
how I survived, I’ll never know"
"Away today away today now
I’m here to stay now"
Well, thank God you survived your medical ordeal and are back to your wonderful self and your profound, personal, evocative poetry. This poem/prayer/song takes us through your terrible journey in deft rhyme, use of repetition, imagery, symbolism, musicality, metaphor... Hoping 2022 will be happy, healthy and hopeful for you. Take good care and please follow doctor's orders.
Sending blessings, love, peace & healing light always. Yes, you are here to stay now, and better than ever-Kudos!

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL I am feeling my old poetic juices starting to flow again thank goodness:) thank you for the confidence booster

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Love you xo

[Ted Kniffen]

A wonderfully written piece here Rob. Filled with sincerity and gratitude. You are grateful to be here ... as we are grateful to have you back.
This one is pretty much straight forward ... the rhyming works well ... the first two verses set up the scenario perfectly.

Our prayers for a full recovery.

Take care my friend!

[Robert Trakofler]

I may never have my heart back to full strength again but my heart is full again

[lightsong]

First, one day when I see You I will steal your dimples and paste them on my cheeks! second, since it's now I hear your SONG! oh my dear Robert.... it's more far beautiful as You sing it... more breathtaking, sincere...heart touching... tears fell from my eyes! I couldn't but remember our friendship journey, I wouldn't take it if You never returned... another loss I wouldn't take it.... Thank You for coming back to us all❤️