Sputnik

Sputnik

A Poem by Jamila
"

Foreign fear

"
I never knew fear
until the day
your Sputnik
entered my orbit
shattering my
illusion of peace
ending my
age of innocence
unleashing
upon me
a profanity
of transmission
that
rocked
my world
shocked
my core
and had
me wishing
the stars above
my head
were truly
real
as
I
crashed
to
Earth.

© 2020 Jamila


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Jamila
Thanx for reading! :)

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Holy heavens! There is no room in the orbit of any relationship for such Sputnik. This makes me rage and boil and fume at the cowardice of those who attack their significant half. Violence of any kind is condemnable and especially against someone who is physically incapable of defending themselves fist to fist. If I were around, I’d shoot them down with a 1000 TNT missile or just shoot them off into the biggest black hole in space. No thinking person will put up with this in today’s times.

Fear and angst so profoundly felt in your few, amazingly well chosen words, dear Madame. Perhaps realisation is beginning to dawn and soon there will be change for the better.

In the meantime, stay safe! You’re appreciated much.

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, Monsieur P! Lol. Calm down, my friend! Put those WMDs away! The situation is well in .. read more



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This is so awesome, I enjoyed this write

Posted 5 Days Ago


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Jamila

5 Days Ago

Thanx so much, Kay-T! I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thanx for stopping by! :)
LOL I guess the trick is to know the stars from the fabricated satellites:) clever as always dear Jamila... after reading this I am hearing Ella Fitzgerald singing "ink spots" into each life some rain must fall but now im left thinking i will have to change the lyrics to into each life false stars must fall:) Something tells me that one of the gifts of Jamila is to take these bits of falsity beacons in wretched and and show them for what they really are and heaven knows we could all use a good geocentric traveling safety chart

Posted 6 Days Ago


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Jamila

5 Days Ago

Thanx so much, dear Robert! Love the Ella reference! Your change would be very appropriate! Her song.. read more
When I first looked at your posted image Jamila, in my sleepy state, it looked like a huge, menacing eye in the darkness. Then I read your lines and they were dark too. Yes a period in time which must have been a hell to live through. You convey the fear in that relationship extremely well and your use of metaphor is superb. Another great read.

Chris

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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Chris! Yes, it was a hellish period and one that tends to rear its head mentally.. read more
I have not personally seen any orbits going off course but I sympathize with those who have had their peaceful pathways invaded
may you spin again in peace and harmony

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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Dave! Those orbits do go of course sometimes, and violently, too! Glad you haven.. read more
Just lovely Jamila
Love does spin everything
Taking us outside of our surroundings
Much like a sputnik in space

lovely !!

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, Serene Star! Love gone bad, in this case. Sputniks are quite menacing. Glad to have m.. read more
Serene Star

1 Week Ago

You never know - right
Things that go bad - get good
Love your work!!
I don't think the Sputnik of this one is the 1957 Soviet satellite. I rather believe it refers to a relationship gone bad, really bad. I think this might have occurred during the teenage years, when the speaker was lacking in experience and vulnerable. The other person was quite verbally abusive; physical abuse is not mentioned, but it may have occurred. Whatever, the speaker was emotionally crushed by it. Perhaps the experience led eventually to the study of psychology.

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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear John! A past year occurrence inspired this. Nothing from teenage years or any re.. read more
the orbit of the abuser is all powerful and all encompassing and takes over and destroys your world until you crash and burn, I watched this up close and personal with my parents and felt helpless, the strength of your words have given you the power back, Jamila, think everyone who reads this will be able to relate to the ugliness of the situation on some level, thank you for sharing,

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, gram! Your comments here are very astute. Thankfully, this orbiting menace of mine ha.. read more
Sputnik will still get to you after the violence has ceased.
Social media, the psychological after curse of any failed relationship.
We get tough or die. One small kick for man, one bigger kick in the mankind.


Posted 1 Week Ago


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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Paul! Lol. A well aimed kick in the mankind is needed for some foul fellows! And.. read more
I have seen it and been there and my heart goes out to those affected by abuse in relationships. The only thing is to break free of the cursed orbit. Ther's joy outside it. Well written.

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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Pearly! I am glad you could relate to the content of this one. The orbit is inde.. read more
I know I was once in this orbit, imagined it would stay the same forever, and then there was one who entered my orbit, we orbited together for awhile...but once she went into a different stratosphere...i was left crash landing into reality. And I am old enough to remember Sputnik...how sad is that? I was seven when it was launched.
j.

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Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear J! That is quite fascinating that you can remember when it was launched in '57. .. read more

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