Brothers in Hospital Beds

Brothers in Hospital Beds

A Poem by MadasonBlue
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Waking up in a hospital.

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I woke up in a bed
And saw I was not where I thought.
The sheets were white where mine were black
And clean where mine were not.
Doctors passed me lying there;
I tried to say “Hello”.
They checked to see that I was well;
My brain felt strangely slow.
 
I turned my head and saw you,
Seeming tired and afraid;
Your cheeks were pale with fear,
Eyes glossed with tears they made.
I wanted suddenly to see you
Happy and alive,
And me to be your friend forever,
So with a sigh, said I,
 
“This is so different from before,
When I couldn’t feel at all.
My inability to feel
Made it easier to fall.
The hurt of hitting the sidewalk
Is so much like your pain.
Are we so different from each other?
We both have gone insane.”

© 2009 MadasonBlue


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This was really good. I like the way you phrased your words in each stanza. Made it more powerful and amazing to read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


im impressed this was very powerful at the end espically. good poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very well done! thanks for sharing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very well done. I really enjoyed reading this, in particular the last two stanzas. The last one, I think, is the most powerful; especially the last two lines.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Love the story. The last is most DEFINATELY the best of it. I'm sorry I'm exhausted, or else I'd explain more of what I love. but just know, I do.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow, I'm very impressed. Well, well done. Line for line it was all good, but the dialogue at the end was the best part.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

original . powerful . brilliant . you are a true poet , very well written my friend .

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like how there was a twist at the end, about the characters being insane...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow...breathtaking write, friend! Fantastic!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh wow. I love this poem. It's really deep! I love the last stanza.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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MadasonBlue
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