Cheetah Gone

Cheetah Gone

A Poem by Maryum Mazhar
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Written by Maryum Mazhar in 2010 ©

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She was evidently elegant
Fur gleaming in the light
Her wet nose wavered in the air
Her brown eyes glimmered bright

Ran she across the misty plain
Filled with dawn's dusty air
There, on the very edge of pride,
Wind in her golden hair

Her whiskers were inquisitive
Brown spots purely amazing
"You're beautiful" I whispered low
As I continued gazing
 
At this great beauty of a beast
That looked too calm for words
As she mischievously chased
A frightened flock of birds

Out of the blue, and suddenly
We heard a gunshot,  clear
Followed by the footsteps of
a single speeding deer

She made one last frantic attempt
From fear of certain death,
To get away, to see more days
But soon she lost her her breath

Alas! The bullet beat her in
The game of live or die
And somewhere near the graveyard
You could hear her baby cry

I walked over to the fallen beast
And my heart gaped with a hole
I dropped my rifle on the ground
What have I done? Oh no!

I fell down to my knees, beside
The beast I had put out
And put the rifle to my head
Went stiff without a sound.

© 2012 Maryum Mazhar


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Maryum Mazhar
Hey! No negative remarks, this is my FIRST piece of poetry on Writers Cafe! Besides, I'm just 14 :D

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This piece had superb imagery. The ending was certainly a surprise.
The rhythm and rhyme really flowed in this piece, and your rhyme flowed really well throughout most of the poem. However, the last stanza broke up the rhyme of the rest of the piece.
Nice work!


Posted 8 Years Ago


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You are born with a talent and you use it well
I like the theme of the poem and the end as well
"At this great beauty of a beast
That looked too calm for words
As she mischievously chased
A frightened flock of birds"
Beautiful!
Keep writing on

Posted 7 Years Ago


Oh Gosh! My heart just broke at the end!!! =,( This is just too sad....



Posted 8 Years Ago


Hi
How are you? i hope all is well with you, i hope you may not know me, and i don't know who you are, My Name is Miss esther, i am just broswing now i just saw your profile it seams like some thing touches me all over my body, i started having some feelings in me which i have never experience in me before, so i became interested in you, l will also like to know you the more,and l want you to send an email to my email address([email protected]) so l can give you my picture for you to know whom l am. I believe we can move from here! I am waiting for your mail to my email address (s/t/h/e/r/b/a/b/y/2/0/1/1/at/h/o/t/m/a/i/l/dot/c/o/m) (Remeber the distance or colour does not matter but love matters alot in life) miss esther

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ok, I didn't expect that last line at all. I loved the imagery in this piece and it flowed well. I have to keep reminding myself that, not everywhere, people enjoy hunting, like where I live. So, I enjoyed the impact of the words and the stanzas were crafted well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


great work here

Posted 8 Years Ago


Awww :( poor thing :/ and this is a great peice, seeing the image dramatically play in my mind, great
Beth :3

Posted 8 Years Ago


my heart broke with the end

Posted 8 Years Ago


Thanks for the awesome reviews everyone! :D


Posted 8 Years Ago


Bravo! Keep writing. This is lovely and tragic and the twist at the end is great.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a wonderful poem. I seriously enjoyed reading it and it made me tear a little. You are a very good writer,

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on September 28, 2011
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Tags: Poetry, Ironic, Sad, Depressing, Emo, Goth, Animals, Killing, Blood, Death

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Maryum Mazhar

Mississaauga, Canada



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So weird. My old about-me still said I'm 14. Well, I'm 16 now, I feel like the person who made this account wasn't me. Anyway, Hi! My name is Maryum. I draw, write and eat. more..

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