Romeo and Juliet

Romeo and Juliet

A Poem by May
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this poem suckksss....like mee.. ha!

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Ah! yet another day

with romeo and juliet

 

oh! what a sweet romance

soft- akin a rose

 

but bitter is unknowing love

and cold are thou intruding

 

life can't always be simple

yet thee loves, thou unknowing

 

 Tis but a fairytale

in the end, alas, tradgedy

 

But i sall love thee evermore

and comfort thee with kisses ga'lore

 

 This maiden never de part from thou

in thy heart enternally- romeo

 

and thee sall never forget you-juliet

thou wilt never leaveth my heart

© 2009 May


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I do not say this sucks...may be just needs a little tender loving care... if your going to write Shakespearean...and old English...for practical reasons...find...but perfectly fine to write this in modern English to have a better feel of the write... Let have at this one:


Ah! yet another day
with romeo and juliet

oh! what a sweet romance
soft- akin a rose

but bitter is unknowing love
and cold are thou intruding

life can't always be simple
yet thee loves, thou unknowing

Tis but a fairytale
in the end, alas, tradgedy

But i sall love thee evermore
and comfort thee with kisses ga'lore

This maiden never de part from thou
in thy heart enternally- romeo

and thee sall never forget you-juliet
thou wilt never leaveth my heart
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Oh! What a sweet romance
Soft akin a rose

But bitter is unknowing love
And cold are thou intruding

Life cannot always be simple
Yet thee loves, thou unknowing

Tis but a fairy tale
In the end, alas, tragedy

But I shall love thee evermore
And comfort thee with kisses galore

This maiden never depart from thou
In thy heart eternally- Romeo

And you shall never forget you-Juliet
Thou wilt never leaves my heart

Now this has life...but you can play with it a bit more and make this sparkle instead of suck...

Posted 6 Years Ago



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