Elsa and Fredo

Elsa and Fredo

A Story by Lea Sheryn
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Elsa and Fredo is a mini story about two young people who grew up together from their childhood days until they graduate from college.

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Elsa and Fredo

 

Elsa knew Fredo loved her.  After all, they had gone to school together.  When they were in kindergarten, he pushed her on the swing.  His laughter rang out behind her as her brown pigtails flew up from her slender young back and she sang “Rain Drops Keep Falling On My Head”.  Even at the youngest age, he was her protector as well as her companion.

 

Fredo walked Elsa home every day after middle school and high school.  He carried her books while she chatted easily about all the things she cared about.  His eyes were always on her.  He liked how she blossomed and how her small breasts lifted the front of her sweater.

 

Fredo took Elsa to the prom.  They had grown into a striking couple.  He was swarthy skinned with brown eyes and black hair; she was pale but her hair had darkened to a beautiful shade of chestnut.  As they danced to modern music, she laced her fingers around his neck and sang, “Rain Drops Keep Falling On My Head” in whispered tones.  He laughed and pulled her close.

 

They attended the same college and, in their senior year, shared an apartment.  Elsa loved Fredo and knew Fredo loved her.  They knew each other well.  She thought they would be together forever.

 

As graduation drew near, Elsa spoke of the future but Fredo was evasive.  With so much on her mind, she barely noticed his unresponsive answers.  She thought their lives were set.

 

It was time to leave their school days behind.  Elsa had found an apartment in the old hometown.  All they had to do was pack up and move.  Much to her surprise, she found Fredo had already packed up.  He was nowhere to be found.  She discovered a note on the kitchen table.  Stunned, she sat holding it in both hands. 

 

Fredo told her he couldn’t stay with her.  She should find someone who was her own type.  He loved her, he said, but she could do better.  She was too good for him; he couldn’t compete with the other men who would want her.

 

Letting the note slip from her hands, Elsa felt hot tears course down her cheeks.  Fredo was wrong; she only wanted him.  She loved him.  She didn’t care for other men; Fredo was the only one for her.

 

Eventually Elsa rose from her lonely seat.  She had to pack her things.  As she went to work collecting her scattered belongings, she found herself singing in melancholy tones, “Rain Drops Keep Falling On My Head”.  It was a bittersweet melody.

© 2019 Lea Sheryn


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Outstanding. All these views, and no one has bothered to read this fine story? It's their loss, for certain. I write stories, too, and have no gripes about this writing at all. I like young romance, and this held me in its grip from beginning to end.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

6 Months Ago

Thank you so very much, Samuel. I greatly appreciate your kind words.


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Vin
You kept it short, yet covered a childhood and youth. And I must say certain moments flashed inside.
It's great if someone can express this much with a love story. Keep flying friend.

Love...

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Vin. This story is a personal favorite of mine. So glad you liked it.
Vin

2 Months Ago

keep writing. All my love & wishes!
You express you ideas well. You have a beautiful way with words. Keep writing l, dear friend.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

2 Months Ago

Thank you! I take a lot of joy in writing stories. I'm glad you liked it.
I really like this, well done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Allie!
this is cute

not overly done, but suttle


still, with stories like these I feel there's more to be desired

perhaps the continuation of Fredo and Elsa's opera


-L.S

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

3 Months Ago

YW

I grew up with Bryan Adams and remember when his first song came out, Cuts Like a .. read more
LitStar

3 Months Ago

ah, no worries

music is universal ^
Lea Sheryn

3 Months Ago

Musc makes the wotld go round.
This is a captivating little read Lea. Enjoyed with my afternoon cuppa. Sadly this happens with young love. So very sad though.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Chris. First love is usually bittersweet.
Christine Anne Shaw

4 Months Ago

I won't disagree with you there. You just have to put it down to experience and learn from it :)
Lea Sheryn

4 Months Ago

We all have to learn from experience. :-))
Heartrending account, Lea.
A lot of years, at least, temporarily, lost.
But then, I guess many young people grow up close
and, eventually, drift apart.
Well told tale!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Jimmy.
Hello Sheryn, I echo Sam's sentiments here. I'm surprised I haven't come across your writing before. You have a very clear narrative direction here, I think you need a defining scene illustrated between Elsa and Fredo before graduation to foreshadow the breakup. A good lesson in "love is often blind". Nice work.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

5 Months Ago

Thank you! I am planning to continue this story which will touch on the reason for the break up.
is this just a setback or truly the end This story reminds me of Paul Harvey and now for the rest of the story. we will never know.You write wonderfully thank you

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

6 Months Ago

Thank you. To be or not to be, that is the question... We'll just have to wait and see. A sequel .. read more
I love to use lyrics in my writing & this song is a great one for the contrasting possibilities it conjures up, plus so recognizable, being in that movie with Redford & Newman. Your storytelling is perfect for this tale. I can tell that you are an intelligent writer, but you intentionally make this simply stated to reflect the sadly one-dimensional view that she has of relationship. The scary thing is that me, being born on fourth of July, super independent, I'm almost 63 & never been married, mostly lived on my own. I have used that very line many times in my youth, the one about "you can do better" . . . when I read that ending, I had flashbacks to the days when I would chew off my paw to get away from commitment. This is great storytelling & perfectly-crafted writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

6 Months Ago

Thank you, Margie, for the wonderful review. You make me feel as though I've accomplished something.. read more
Outstanding. All these views, and no one has bothered to read this fine story? It's their loss, for certain. I write stories, too, and have no gripes about this writing at all. I like young romance, and this held me in its grip from beginning to end.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lea Sheryn

6 Months Ago

Thank you so very much, Samuel. I greatly appreciate your kind words.

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