Try, Again

Try, Again

A Poem by WeakFreak
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no one understands how hard something can be in someone else's head.

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I tell you I try,
But failure is weak,
You tell me not to cry,
I'll swallow my tears,
I won't blink,
I don't like crying anyway,
But that doesn't mean it's easy,
Sometimes I want relief,
Sometimes I ask for death,
It seems stupid to get so upset,
Well screw it,
You're not in this mess,
You don't understand,
My mind is a car wreck,
A circus,
A jail,
My mind is a mad house,
A liar,
The chief of police,
You don't get how one simple thing,
Could mean the difference,
Between life,
And my soul dying,
I try,
But I can't say I told you,
So I shut up or lie,
Maybe I don't understand your mind,
but I don't claim I do,
I don't knock down your prison walls,
And let the criminally insane rain down on that place,
So give me a break,
Sorry,
Can I speak?
Permission is nothing,
If the words and the tears are stuck in my throat,
I'll build a mote around the castle in my mind,
And never let you in,
I would have told you I tried,
But then I'd have no place to hide,
As the mote floods the castle
And the whole kingdom dies,
I tried. 

© 2018 WeakFreak


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You know just before I read your poem, someone told me that I need to go to a psychiatrist. So, this poem really speaks my pandemonium feelings. I may never understand how chaotic your mind is right now but I thank you for showing what you really feel and thank you as well for sharing this shard of your mind to us. I know it is not my place to say this but don't be afraid to reveal who you really are, even if you don't understand yourself, at least share a bit of your life to someone you trust and even if they don't understand you at least they still accept you no matter how shambled your mind is. I'm truly sorry if i have overstep my boundaries but i just wanted to say what did i feel. one more thing, I really love this poem.

Posted 9 Months Ago


WeakFreak

9 Months Ago

you didn't overstep at all I really love hearing what you think. I'm working on that actually, I use.. read more
Flowers of Eternity

9 Months Ago

Your very welcome, I'm glad, I thought I overstep my boundaries. I'm happy for you too.
I love the orderly chaos that is clearly going through your mind. I feel this too. No one really understands me - or want to for that matter. This is why I adopted a pseudonym and took to the internet to voice my emotions. Excellent work! Relatable.

Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

thanks, I'm not sure if I'd say the chaos is orderly though, sometimes I don't even know what I'm on.. read more
emptyinkwell

11 Months Ago

It really seemed like you were onto something here, but I get that. I lose myself in my thoughts too.. read more
WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Yeah, when writing I can often explain what's going on but sometime's a feel so lost, like my mind i.. read more
Ah, when people claim to understand us when they obviously don't. It can be fustrating when people speak for us, thinking they know us. Well they don't! I hope this poem will have a happy ending in real life for you...
Sometimes we try to reach those people but fail to make them see clearly. We try. We fail. We repeat.


Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Very truth, thank S.A.P.
A wandering mind. I enjoyed this read. It would make interesting performance poetry. All good wishes.

Chris

Posted 11 Months Ago


I love the rhythm of this write, where you can feel every try like the ring of a bell. This would be excellent on stage at a spoken-word event, you would kill it!!! :):)

V

Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Thanks, I've never been to one of those, it sounds cool
Verse

11 Months Ago

It’s where you stand on stage in front of a small crowd, and read your poem to entertain them. ;)
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I think you share what a lot of people feel. Some feel it more than others.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Beautifully combined. I like the way your words are conflicting.
But I can't prevent him from getting in, though he's nowhere to be found.

Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Yeah, kinda thanks for the read
Wow, interesting poem. I really enjoyed the imagery, and I liked that the structure of this poem seemed disjointed, mirroring the narrator's disorganized state of mind. This is a piece that beats to its own rhythm, and I really like that.

Keep up the great work!

-Derekv

Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Thank you Derek
The picture you paint,and the ideas you write, they're truly inspiring and unique. Reading your poetry kinda has this, freeing feeling, bc it doesn't follow many of the "rules" of poetry. I personally love that.kinda
Good job, and keep it up!

Posted 11 Months Ago


WeakFreak

11 Months Ago

Thank you :)

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Added on October 30, 2018
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I'm kind of odd, and kind of normal, I'm good at faking things and I like writing cause I can tell the truth and no one thinks anything of it cause to them it's just a poem, or just a story. And maybe.. more..

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