Lovesick

Lovesick

A Poem by ZakLeonRamsey
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Ever get that wonderful heart-racing feeling? Well this is first-hand experience.

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Lovesick 

20th December 2019 

 

The stomach of one’s soul 

Aches with everlasting lovesick 

While one’s lungs 

Respirate so desperately 

For the words 

Of our flirting peers 

Make us laugh so uncontrollably 

 

Minutes are momentary, 

The clock handles are blurry, 

To unfocused eyes, 

For attention is given 

To each other instead. 

 

 

© 2019 ZakLeonRamsey


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i can remember what being love sick is like ... the title grabbed me right away .. i like the length ... ;) i am a little confused as to theme as it adds a bit about itching ears and flirting peers ... time can certainly be illusory ..especially when smitten ... two love struck create an eternal moment .. one that we treasure no matter what comes in the years after ... "Respirate" seems a bit out of place to me ... it rings a bit too technical ... panting, heaving, etc. perhaps ...but that's just me ... had to read through several times ... thanks for sharing!
E.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ZakLeonRamsey

6 Months Ago

I can understand why ‘respirate’ May be a bit bizarre in the poem. I was just advancing my vocab.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

ahhhhhhhh thank you for explaining to me ... much appreciated!
ZakLeonRamsey

6 Months Ago

No problem - Z



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i can remember what being love sick is like ... the title grabbed me right away .. i like the length ... ;) i am a little confused as to theme as it adds a bit about itching ears and flirting peers ... time can certainly be illusory ..especially when smitten ... two love struck create an eternal moment .. one that we treasure no matter what comes in the years after ... "Respirate" seems a bit out of place to me ... it rings a bit too technical ... panting, heaving, etc. perhaps ...but that's just me ... had to read through several times ... thanks for sharing!
E.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ZakLeonRamsey

6 Months Ago

I can understand why ‘respirate’ May be a bit bizarre in the poem. I was just advancing my vocab.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

ahhhhhhhh thank you for explaining to me ... much appreciated!
ZakLeonRamsey

6 Months Ago

No problem - Z

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Added on December 20, 2019
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ZakLeonRamsey
ZakLeonRamsey

Dewsbury, West Yorkshire, United Kingdom



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Hey there. I'm Zak. I have a pretty low concentration span, and that's a problem for writing because I think of an idea and then not even a chapter through, I'm bored, so maybe poetry would suit me mo.. more..

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