Fiery Winds

Fiery Winds

A Poem by barleygirl
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Santa Anas blow off the hot desert . . .

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Down yonder wasteland where silt blasts in
Santa Anas pluck yer guts like a mandolin
oasis caliente icily scalds the skin
burnished blurs, the mocking thunderbirds.

Visions of Celeste sprinkle a refreshing spritz
while he howls her haunts in a blowing blitz
dust devils do a twisted twirl for Tahquitz
fluttering feathers sweep away his last words.

Raging regret twangs on rusted barbed wire
thundering boulders warn of his crushing ire
blistering breeze rekindles her smoldering fire
medicine marks say she’s of the thunderbirds.

Late night campfire sparks spray and sputter
when Santa Anas spread the sand like butter
legend of Tahquitz moans along each flutter
irresistibly she’s drawn to shadow his words.

© 2019 barleygirl


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ouch....i felt the heat...you are so visual...i worked pizza ovens for so many years and was used to the heat and often getting burned without even noticing....but this one makes me go get the balm put some on my brain...
and all of that fun alliteration you are so good at using...
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Your words are soothing balm, in contrast to my blistering sentiments here! *wink! wink!* Since I'm .. read more



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Those winds sound scorchio Margie. I can only think how devastating they can become. The risks of wild fires must be huge. You conjured up some pretty wild imagery and I felt the heat in your lines. Great alliteration and Margie speak as always in your distinctive style. Always good to read you.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Since everyone associates the Santa Anas with fueling some of the most devastating fires in Southern.. read more
ouch. feels like i need to cover my face with a bandanna. I've heard/read about those winds but now I've felt them first hand. very clever, lighthearted look at a scalding subject. creatively visual. good stuff i say (the write, not the hot, pesky winds. probably feels like sandpaper ... :)

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Santa Anas pluck yer guts like a mandolin

oasis caliente icily scalds the skin

when Santa Anas spread the sand like butter

all terrifically spun ...

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I just finished reading a desert novel by Louis L'Amour & I was mightily inspired to write a few des.. read more
A visual feast, Margie. I recently read East of Eden and Grapes of Wrath for the first time. The Dust Bowl in particular came to mind when I was reading this. The way the earth responds to human activity or simply does its thing in the middle of the human world. So many necessary things for a healthy planet that do not fit in with our concept of the earth as a giver of life.

I love your dance with words. It seems to honor and acknowledge both sides. And, mostly, I just love your creativity. I feel like I’m in the middle of it all.

Great work, here

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I was reading a novel by Louis L'Amour (who has a similar earthy palpable writing style as John Stei.. read more
very visual material here

i like how you make it feel like the reader is right there with you


awesome write

Posted 1 Month Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I must confess, I was mightily influenced by the novel writer Louis L'Amour, since I was reading a b.. read more
LitStar

3 Weeks Ago

sounds like it would be an influential book
Your words scorch me Margie, choking on Desert dust, and still managed to throw a fiery poem into a fiery wind.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Thanks for stopping by for a little benediction by fire! *wink! wink!* Actually we are having an ama.. read more
Torrid winds that spread death and destruction like seas of fire...I remember them. Your title, poem and blazing imagery bring it all back to me Margie. Great colloquial language and simile-“Santa Anas pluck yer guts like a mandolin.” Skillful rhyme and alliteration throughout. Each line ominous, building mystery and tension. Had to research the legend of Tahquitz and found it a mighty powerful and scary piece of Native American lore. Your picture of the Canyon is gorgeous. Loved the journey through this and didn’t get eaten alive by Tahquitz on the way! Awesome poem!

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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

It's hard to think about the Santa Anas & not think about the various LA fires it's spawned & fanned.. read more
I like how you can excel in multitude of themes and genres. Deserts hold our imaginations in awe, in magical shows and fiery warnings. It is not strange that most known prophets came from harsh deserts where sand and sky fired their spirituality. Deserts do have unique charms and languages full of beauty as your words.

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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

My existence is very limited, living in the boondocks, being housebound & disabled. When I first got.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Month Ago

All true and wonderful. Pen. on. You are welcome anyway...
"warn of his crushing ire
blistering breeze rekindles her smoldering fire"

Posted 1 Month Ago


"oasis caliente icily scalds the skin
burnished blurs, the mocking thunderbirds."

Posted 1 Month Ago


Your imagery is stark and visceral, creating glowing word pictures.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Thank you for a great review! The full moon energizes me & I can't sleep! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
MomzillaNC

1 Month Ago

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