Rose Blush

Rose Blush

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by friend's photography . . .

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Glaciers plunge and crush
blazes blacken the brush
song thrush flitters in a rush
flashfloods inflict a flush
harsh echoes taint the hush
serpents swill the underbrush
hazy twinkles melt to mush
a sudden deep woods shush
dew cracks crisp and plush
sky-tickles snapping paintbrush
arising to your soft rose blush
glaciers plunge and crush.

© 2020 barleygirl


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What a gorgeous portrait interpreting someone else's art. I'm amazed that you worked this many same end-rhymes into this poem, but I think it's excellent because it creates an almost hypnotic effect. Like standing on the seashore watching the sunset. The waves keep coming in and the sound just drowns out everything else but the spirit of the moment as the light fades.

I love that you began and ended with the same line. It makes it feel like a type of form, but more importantly, it makes it feel complete. A climactic moment drifting out. I really enjoyed this one, Margie. It carries a bit of zen with it. At least for my mind.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

As always, I love how you share your impressions, especially the idea of lines like lapping waves. T.. read more



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now you're speaking my language - i'm in rhyming Heaven. wow, have to catch my breath. pic and words fit perfectly together. love the imagery and word combinations. unforgettable ... :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Pete, you add a little warmth to my otherwise cold wet morning of deliciously downpouring rain (we'v.. read more
I love how you have unobtrusively yet profoundly expressed nature and surrounding. My favorite line was,"harsh echoes taint the hush." I really like the use alliteration in L4. In my head it sounds like a rap lyric. I think the first two lines also describes the environmental issues caused by anthropogenic activities (Melting of glaciers, amazon forest fires). As one reads it over and over, it just engulfs you and teleports you to a tranquil place and fills you with satiety. Keep up the good work.

Peace✌

Posted 4 Months Ago


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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

This is a killer review & I'm deeply grateful! "harsh echoes taint the hush" is my comment about how.. read more
This reminded me of goodnight moon (one of my favorite children's books other than the Raven) like the picture of your poems depiction the children's poem was written with this gorgeous illustration but in it is many *ush words:) but this was a lovely depiction of that picture filled with barley whimsy:)

Posted 4 Months Ago


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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

I only remember one children's book . . . can't remember the name, but a kid decided to open a resta.. read more
What a beautiful way to comment on state of our environment, global warming and how it affects different hemispheres. Your words are perfectly chosen to describe what is going on in this crazy world. Your rhyme is strong for this poem. It really hits you and makes you think (Which some of us don't)!!!! hugs, Betty

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Was I out of the ball park???
barleygirl

4 Months Ago

No reader is EVER out of the ballpark! I love hearing what directions other writers take it . . . sh.. read more
Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Okay, I’m happy!
What a beautiful image this put in my head. You described these colours so vividly it was absolutely lovely.

Posted 4 Months Ago


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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Thank you . . . sometimes I just want to focus on the beauty of life & not try to find any meaning! .. read more
Glaciers plunge and crush!
This is such a fine example of nature poetry! You have created a multi-dimensional picture, including visual, sound and even tactical! A very keen observational eye needed to take in all the little things that make a scenery beautiful and convert it into exquisite poetry with deft strokes of the pen. My most favourite line here is,’Song thrush flitters in a rush’ To me, this was breathtaking!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

When I started at the cafe 5 years ago, I was the most unobservant person around . . . being here & .. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

4 Months Ago

It’s my delight and pleasure! Hugs!
This is a moment appreciated for what it is, a calming reflection amongst many moments we barely have any control over and an appreciation of the beauty seen and given to a weary heart.
We never know the minute a landscape can disappear or be irrecoverably damaged, so pausing and reflecting on the surrounding beauty is all the more beautiful for its and our fragility.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Now that you mention it, you almost described the exact feeling I get when I see this friend's photo.. read more
Lorry

4 Months Ago

Fed up of the USA? What's Trumpet got to say about that?
I'm assuming that since Trump won la.. read more
Your friend’s photography is breathtaking Margie, and you execute your carry-through poem so very well. Crazy-good rhyme and cadence rock my mind gently to and fro. Great imagery and repetition describing a cycle of time and nature defined by glacier movement. As beautiful as a “rose blush”!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

WOW! Your review kinda makes me rock out too! Love how you felt the rocking of the sea, something I .. read more
'Rose Blush'
barleygirl,
This is the picture of a picure of a picture; felt like that to me. A color can be connected to another thought which is transposed through a thought which is then connected to a memory. This piece was
like that. It also read like a saga starting with your first line.."Glaciers plunge and crush" then unfold-
into other complex layers of time processing through time, experience and feeling yea..to end and
circle around again,"glaciers plunge and crush." This was such a cool sharp poem with great rhyme.
Blessings,
kathy

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

My friend posted this picture . . . his last of 2019 . . & I've been looking at it on my desktop al.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

4 Months Ago

Yes, we all need inspiration. Especially precious when it is something special such as a friendship... read more
barleygirl

4 Months Ago

His flow of pics continues, but this one was memorable as his last glimpse of 2019 . . .
Margie, your poetry never ceases to make me wonder how you make such perfect meaning along with such lovely rhyming. The picture is beautiful but you add so much depth and dimension to the scenery. How does it all come to you? I’d love to know and learn some day!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Aww thank you so much for sharing your creative process with me Margie. I read it aloud to mom she l.. read more
barleygirl

4 Months Ago

I should make this into a posting. Thanks for the shove! (((HUGS)))
Rania

4 Months Ago

Oh yes! That’s such a lovely idea Margie. So many would benefit. Hugs! ❤️

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