Get My Feet Wet

Get My Feet Wet

A Poem by barleygirl
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Stings like a caustic vinaigrette
smolders like a wayward cigarette
screeches like a tortured clarinet
reads like a cheap cheesy novelette
spiked by disruption at the outset
snipping my tissue like a curette
dodging the inevitable bayonet
tempted by this discordant duet
what’s another anguished regret
prior to nightfall, a ravishing sunset
surrender feels like a sad epithet
here I go, gonna get my feet wet.

© 2020 barleygirl


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love the way you describe getting your toes wet...and the little girl in the pic is precious.
i used to do a duet , Blues poetry, with a clarinetist...he would appreciate this.
inevitably....sometimes he and i were discordant, and had no running water to dip our spirits into.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

This is the ultimate response/share that I've gotten in a long time. Love it! Thanks for brightening.. read more



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Margie I’ll be honest I’m jealous green with envy of your rhyming prowess. I can’t rhyme at all and if I do it’s pure accidental or An act of Gods fate and kindness on me.

Love this and the cute pic
Take care 💋 xx

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I've been on a rhyming binge lately & it's becuz of how chaotic the world seems to be . . . rhyming .. read more
a delightful dip. an innocent child testing out the waters. very telling. i like the way your well chosen words meander along, building as she musters the courage and daring. there is a sweet innocence in this going up against a harsh reality. good write? you bet ... :)

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I love how you caught how this represents courage being mustered! Thanks for checking it out! (((HUG.. read more
I loved every sentence dear Margie. Was a pleasure to read the proper flow of words and thoughts. Very nice to get your feet wet sometimes. Make us feel alive. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

We've been getting rare late cold rains for two weeks & this reminds me of how, when younger, I woul.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Week Ago

Always rainy days in Michigan in March and April. Nice to walk in the rain on a warm Spring day. Hav.. read more
barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Bunny just reported 65 in Pittsburgh (below), so it must be mild in Michigan, too, is what I'm figur.. read more
hell f*****g yes this is a Barley poem! boom boom boom... Barley poem! you write like you like nobody else Margies Barley:) I love this from the tip of those cute little damp toes to the edge of her bonnet! What a great poem did this expression come thru for you was I able to capture how much I like this one? hope so cause it is great:)

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

This might be the most enthusiastically you've ever reviewed me & it sent me off the edge of my bluf.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

1 Week Ago

he he its 65 here:)
barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Can I get another hoot from Pittburgh as I shiver on yet another morn in the high 30's?!?!!? BRRRRR!
Love your monotone
rhyme poems..you
are so good at these
with rhythm spot on
I say take the plunge
dip your toes..get those
feet wet...nice work




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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Thanks for always stopping by with cheerful words of encouragement! Hope everything is going okay fo.. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

you're so welcome
all is well here
a day at a time..you know
stay well and take.. read more
Woah! You compare so many different things, yet it seems to collide in perfect succession and unison. Also, very impressed with the mono-rhyme.

James

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I'm kinda addicted to rhyming. When I started here 5 years ago, poets kinda looked down their noses .. read more
JamesTleBourn

1 Week Ago

I started 3-4 months ago- so I don't know much of the ebbs and flows of the trends
I really liked your enjambment in this, Margie, at least it reads that way to me as you get near the end of the poem. Especially at lines nine and ten where it reads like a spill over--'what's another anguished regret / prior to nightfall'--really like that. And you know how I love to use enjambment myself, so I always enjoy it when I see to put to good effect in other people's poems.

This is full of original comparisons. Things that aren't immediately intuitive as being related to taking the plunge, but they create vivid images in the mind. And they make your question of 'what's another anguished regret' seem imperative. Life presses in at all times, so what's stopping us from enjoying whatever moment we can. At least that is my ultimate take away. There can always be an excuse not to dip in a toe, but alternatively, there are just as make excuses for diving in.

Really enjoyed this. Something to elevate the mind in tough times.

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Thanks to the influence of reading highly-inventive writers like you, I've tried to come up with com.. read more
I was tapping my feet to the upbeat and energetic beat of this poem. God! How we need something like this to pull us through these dismal times. Nature is the best cure! Here I go! I’m gonna get my feet wet too! Love your zest always Margie!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I believe much of that upbeat energy is coming from YOU & your way of reading poetry & life! Thank y.. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

2 Weeks Ago

Yes yes and yes! You made such a difference to my evening here and I send many grateful big hugs to .. read more
I haven't seen so many unique images rhyming successive lines in a good while. Interestingly, all of them before the last three have a negative connotation. I think what we have here is a declaration that despite all of the unpleasantries that we can encounter, the best course is not to hesitate, but to dive right into life. Why not? That inevitable bayonet is coming anyway (speaking as one who nearly got bayoneted once.)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for an enjoyable review! You are the only person who mentioned the "progression" which is mea.. read more
Good picture...great poem. The rhyme scheme is excellent. It reads well...good flow...the Muse has camped on your doorstep for sure. Well done Bgirl.
One thing...a little one, but you know me...third line 'a' instead of 'an' before tortured. ;>}

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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the good catch. I hate to leave a mistake like that. Thanks for stopping by to brighte.. read more

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