Before We Were Poets

Before We Were Poets

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by Jacob's one-word sonnet . . .

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Before we could strut
our iambic pentameter
a kiss could be a sonnet
a hawk could be haiku
when we didn’t meter
all of our I love you’s.

© 2020 barleygirl


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meter? i'm still trying to grasp the english system of measurement... screw that metric crap And I had my IAMBIC surgically removed years ago, it was disrupting my ability to swallow. Incidentally many forward thinking parents are having the Iambic removed from there children to avoid potential throat infections.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

You are on a hilarious roll this morning! I love the idea of getting one's IAMBIC surgically removed.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

3 Weeks Ago

its all yours love I was just planting a new seed for your garden dear Margie:)
andrew mitchell

2 Weeks Ago

Robert you are a master in itself lol. Love your response!



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This is such a lovely image you paint (plus I also love the literal image you chose, the old couple is adorable)
Your words hold such truth and power. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece with us!

Posted 1 Day Ago


Hi Margie; to me this is kind of a spoof on measured poetry. It's short, meaningful and witty. As always I love your choice of words! Fondly. Betty

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barleygirl

1 Day Ago

I do have a bad habit of hounding those who are addicted to fancy poetic forms, despite my efforts t.. read more
How clever and how true this is!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for your kind words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
A skillfully penned piece that made me smile. Every line clicks into place and its a fun read. What a great way to start the day! Great job Margie!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for stopping by to lift my spirits! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Skillfully written and artfully composed my friend. Yes, I agree with you and with Jacob that poetry should not have imposed constraints- and the same with love. Honest, pure and from the heart is always best. You say this perfectly through lyrical language and endearing imagery. Love this!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for stopping by to share & delight! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Such clever writing even tho that pic is near porn! OK, so I needed a laugh... and found it here as often do. THANK YOU, darlin'! For me all that formal purist stuff near kills my urge to write< instead I dive into words, they either do me a favour or don't, as often shows by the hordes of reviews received That said, i love, as you do so much better, just say out loud what tickles the internal senses. Your sense of humour is a pure or pure-ish health cure!. Take care of precious you, keep safe, please very much.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for a lively & uplifting review! I love how you say "it kills my urge to write" . . . I reall.. read more
hmmmmmmm raises an intriguing point for me ... is life before expression the real true and pure poetry .. so now we take time to consider .. formulate .. agonize .. and pen ...... what?? ... words on a page .. thinking we capture it ... move people's hearts and minds .. hmmmmmmmmmmm ..i had a dream about a kiss two nights ago, Margie ... a kiss of all kisses ever and going back for more it remained so .. hmmmmmmm such a dream ... we should be so pure eh!? peace, love ... and that's a terrible picture ... all i can think of is bad breath drooling and ....... that's going to be me soon .... if i am lucky :)))))))))))
E.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

After living with only dogs for the past few decades, I've advanced well into the bad breath droolin.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

yes yes yes~ exactly so .. even now it strikes me and fills me ... we drool together my friend! :))).. read more

... was there ever such a time ... in the great scheme of things & words of Freddie Mercury nothing really meters at all.... okay, I'll pay up but I want all the copies and the negatives .. (SNOGs) fondly, Meeee

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

When my mom sorted her junk many years ago, she gave me a box of my school papers. In there was an a.. read more
Neville

3 Weeks Ago


.......................... Gotcha (QUILLS) fondly.. :)
Sorry, Margie, , but Jacob's poem said "Smack"....not "Slurp". Loved your additional extrapolations, however. Not a very flattering portrait of Trish and I, though. :-))
(Hugs)) Norm










Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Very sassy! Thanks for the correction! I agree that Jacob's kiss wasn't nearly as welcoming as mine,.. read more
Margie, it's that pause and hesitation that's so striking here, the sad reality we lose something authentic in the desire to conform, squeeze ourselves in someone else's tight box. I must admit I've studied iambic pentameter, and it's left me with a migraine every time. I think I like the unstressed and stressed syllables much more in your poem than others. :) Love the photo, too.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Like you, I gave extensive attention to iambic pentamter -- da DAH da DAH da DAH! No matter how I tr.. read more
R.E. Ray

3 Weeks Ago

You make me laugh, Margie. I'm the same. Maybe that's why I am also opposed to the Metric System. .. read more

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