Rain Headed Our Way

Rain Headed Our Way

A Poem by barleygirl
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another photo by my friend slays me . . .

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Ominous obscurity blots out the dawn
summer day swallowed by a dark swan
seafaring cyclone flaunts all her brawn
our salt-flinging song: just bring it on!

Wet smoldering swath headed our way
forget drudgery on a melodramatic day
deserted beach a sensory superhighway
smooth bare skin makes the rain ricochet.

Storm-worshipping congregation of two
hey! your brightly-dotted do-rag just flew
skittering ions give us frizz shampoos
we sand sprawl as a deep deluge unscrews.

After a crazed squall we plug back in
roll out to sea to see the storm slacken
splash a brackish sea all broody-blackened
briny boogaloo, now our day’s high-jackin’.

© 2020 barleygirl


Author's Note

barleygirl
Randy's Photo: Storm heading in to Thailand beach off the Indian Ocean.

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I want to dive into the storm clouds and drag them over here... the heat is sweltering and oppressive to match the general climate of disdain wafting about me. no amount of meditation is culling this feeling right now it's as thick as the pandemic miasma and almost as deadly. I could use a rainstorm right now Margie Barley and maybe a little speck of seacoast to lull away my angst with the tide:) bring on the storms Willis let them cry and cleanse for i am losing my strength

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Amen, my friend! I couldn't have said it better! You nailed it how I was feeling when I first saw th.. read more



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Okay I just left a review for your poem ‘Barley Moon’ and pretty much everything I said there applies here too XD
It flows brilliantly, the imagery is colourful and unique, the language is fun and what I forgot to mention in the previous review is that the rhyming is inspired! Simply genius, these rhymes theoretically shouldn’t work but you spin them together and they somehow make sense and are just so cleverly utilised.
Thank you for sharing!

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Days Ago

I'm going to go outside & water my garden now, but I might float off into space after these two amaz.. read more
Nothing like a storm, but last week it was hot, hot, hot over here and on Friday the temperature topped 100 F, ever so high for us; then on Saturday, though still hot, we were blessed with rain in the late afternoon.

Charlie and I, (not the only ones to do it, I'm sure,) went and stood outside, turned our faces to the sky and let the rain fall on us; it was so cooling, so refreshing, even the flowers seemed to burst more into life.

Great poem and a wonderful compliment to that fantastic photographic capture.

Beccy.


Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

A lifetime in California & I've hardly experienced any summer rains. One time I spent 6 months worki.. read more
Hey you - this made me smile - love the rythym and pace - love the humour - love the visuals

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Thank you for stopping by to check this out & leave a smile on my face (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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I think my favorite line is when you describe the deserted beach as a "sensory superhighway".

Now that I'm thinking of it I'm having trouble ending my list of "sensations" you would have on a beach, even all alone.

Loved it!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I feel so honored by your enthusiastic response! The best feeling is when someone relates to some wo.. read more
Wow... a Storm of such emotion as a locomotive train
where the Rain rambles along at great speed...
Margie... you have made an impression on my mind
when thunder rolls and waves collide...
Just a poem for a review. We just had a huge
thunder and lightening storm where finally
the Rain poured down. We were becoming frantic when the grass
was so dry like Corn flakes without milk. The photo is awesome
from Thailand. Lovely to read your unique lines... clickity clack...
fondly, Pat

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

This is one of your most effusive shares & I'm visualizing it with all my senses! Despite it being a.. read more
This is like a picture perfect imagery of how the personality of cyclone is and what happens before and after it shows up.
The poetry has so many phrases that I really love. The vision is outstanding. It gives me a murky feel at first which is followed by a mirth. I wish I could get to witness all the nature's play. Although the poetry feels dark but you have the knack of making anything bright with your positivity.
Love it!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

This is an amazing description of many things I was feeling as I wrote this! Thanks for pumping up m.. read more
Margie, I absolutely see the "dark swan" and the funneling of clouds in that amazing picture! Your words beautifully describe nature rising to make her might known. You present us with an exciting, uplifting, rocking an rolling, free-spirited sail on a roused sea- unafraid and un-cowed. I get it! The tumult is well-met by the brave sea farers (especially serendipitous since we have been drowning in big-boomer thunderstorms this week in Florida). Great rhyme, rhythm, imagery, alliteration. Salty, refreshing and encouraging write.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

My friend who took this picture (my age) is married to a 30-something African woman who kinda remind.. read more
What a great way to vividly describe an oncoming storm..perfect rhyme with a lot of smacking wit. Some people actually get a thrill out of these storms as you so perfectly show.I just love your choice of words...always with a punch.. great poem Margie; fondly, Betty xo

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

In California we don't get much weather, so I'm always hungry for a summer rain, which never happens.. read more
Betty Hermelee

2 Weeks Ago

Your welcome!
Beautiful photo and strong words dear Margie. I saw the Winter storms of the Pacific. They taught me. I wasn't so powerful. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Always love your firsthand shares about different aspects of life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Nice! I love the rhymes and imagery! ‘We sand sprawl as a deep deluge unscrews’. Heck yeah, I like you’re wording. I need to check out more of your stuff

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for stopping by! I've been sketchy this summer, but I will stop by & check out your stuff, to.. read more

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