Savvy Sycamore

Savvy Sycamore

A Poem by barleygirl
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cluster of haiku . . .

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Dazzled daybreak roosts
savvy sycamore simmers
candied coffee nips.

Honey-hued healing
upstages festering sky
paint away the rage.

Turn oxidized cheek
melancholy murmurs
foil the fracas within.

Pump the pungent
California Everlasting
maple-scented muse.

Let me climb your limbs
mount my sturdy sycamore
thighs hugging tightly.

© 2020 barleygirl


Author's Note

barleygirl
Photo: sycamore tree in autumn, looking out my kitchen window.
Note: Haiku is 17 syllables total . . . most go by the standard 5 - 7 - 5, but that is not a requirement. I've not followed that line pattern in a few places.
California Everlasting: a blooming shrub that grows in the chaparral around me & it dries out in October (hot all month), then when the moisture of November hits, on a chilly dewy morning, the aroma of maple is wafting all over these hills!

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Hmmm....while I am sure this is a nature poem, not so sure about that last stanza! As you always say, "wink, wink." :) The alliteration in the stanzas is just great. I never write form poetry so I can not comment on the quality of Haiku, but I can say I enjoyed this one. Lydi**

Posted 3 Months Ago


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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Love how you use my "wink-wink" back at me! I guess it's near impossible to write about the sensory .. read more



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Nice style Margie, what a lovely idea hug a tree today I got from your last stanza but that’s after I originally thought it was sexual. Yes autumn is a time of many changers, my favourite season.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

That last one is meant to be ambiguous. I find climbing trees to be a sensual thing. Thanks for stop.. read more
The imagery is beautiful, creative, great word choices. I really enjoyed this:)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you for stopping by & brightening my day! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
I wouldn't immediately recognize a Haiku if my life was threatened
but the continual repetition finally made me notice there was some kind of a certain form involved?
Trying to ID this on Google was too frustrating but after reading the other reviews< I finally got a clue and finally realized what a very impressive presentation you have created and how athletic you still are at your very advanced age
Not only that but You have got more reviews for this write than I usually get in reads!!
Just shows what effect a sycamore can have!!
Nicely done BG

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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I have indeed cheetahed, and in addition, I have a bad case of cheethead!
Dave Brown

3 Months Ago

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what a lovely view from these versatile Haikus! The first haiku set the mood for me, and it's the perfect weather now for tree watching, the burst of colors, the chill that's warmed by fragrant nature. The last stanza / haiku looks like it may have raised a few eyebrows and tickled a few pink, myself included, I love the suggestive hint while retaining its innocence. lol, this reminds me so much of childhood in Kentucky. riding out on old Maggie to sit on a fallen tree to read or draw the landscape. Very enjoyable!

Posted 3 Months Ago


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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

This review is pure awesomeness, especially the Kentucky reverie! Thanks for sharing that! (((HUGS)).. read more
I like your poetic language, it keeps me entertained and interesting in what you say. This is a beautiful poem that is wonderfully written. And the photo is beautiful! tyfs

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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you for such a generous review! I'm sparkling from the warm attention! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Marg.. read more
Your sycamore reminds me of my mahogony tree. I love it so much and used to play around when I was a kid. Loved the oxidised cheek and melancholy murmur.... It is so poetic. Generally we use melancholy with silence but your choice of word is outstanding here. Loved the honey hued healing also. Nice work

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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I really feel your appreciation, & it feels like a million dollars! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
“Tree-Hugger” takes on a whole new and daring meaning in the gem of imagery and marvelous alliteration that is your poem dear Margie-girl! Your virile hunk of handsome autumnal sycamore is more than up to the task of cradling its passionate admirer, I would say. He certainly is a robust “maple-scented muse” that captures a fluttering heart in his golden branches. Love the balance and joy in your evocative, skillful verses my friend!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Cherrie went into detail to share some of her tree-loving experiences, which in turn makes me want t.. read more
I love this line for the fact I can really see myself on the tree: Let me climb your limbs
mount my sturdy sycamore
thighs hugging tightly. You never disappoint with your poems I have read so far. -Kay

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Your reviews are so generous, I feel honored by your praise! I tried to make that last one NOT a com.. read more
Kay/Hayden

3 Months Ago

Aw, I hope you have a great Thanksgiving! (Yes I realize I have said this in every review to you and.. read more
I'll tell what this makes me think of. Being a kid and always climbing on some tree to see how high I could go. The first real freedom in life, for me was found in discovering nature.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

At the end of this, I took that little curve into tree climbing, but now that I read your review, I .. read more
Cherrie Palmer

3 Months Ago

I'll tell you when I was 10 my grandma needed to take me to a funeral of one of my great great aunt.. read more
barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I love it! I was lucky becuz I could crawl thru poison oak tunnels & not get a bit of it. I did this.. read more
dearest Margie... your poetry is very sensuous climbing and hugging a Sycamore Trunk and why not... if Tarzan and Jane were swinging in trees ... we can discover the view. I love living in a Tree House where Nature can breathe without spreading a virus.... perhaps homes for the future. Love and good wishes for a delicious Thanksgiving.. generously with prayers, Pat xo

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barleygirl

3 Months Ago

In 2nd grade, we lived in a county park on the edge of town, San Francisco Bay area . . . the bus wo.. read more
Patricia Wedel

3 Months Ago

HimMargie... I remember the awakening time when we were young... guess what ?
There is an a.. read more

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