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Sunrise, Sunset

Sunrise, Sunset

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by Pete's poem "Cognisance" . . .

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Swarthy seagull pitches a flippant fit
glib taunts hurled by edgy wingtips
keow . . . mew . . . keow . . . hahaha
mated masts frame his harbor frolic
morning stopover, a pithy once-over
to decode this cryptic sunrise poet.

Pompous puffins and laconic otters
decorate the sunset end of this day
taking cavalier cormorants in stride
a tempestuous cliffhanging cynic
ponders two sun-dappled pelicans
rocktop bopping to a surfer’s beat.



Link to Pete's poem:

https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/ptine/2762459/

© 2021 barleygirl


Author's Note

barleygirl
Click on thumbnail for a larger view of Boston Harbor, near where Pete does some of his seagull gazing with a sunrise motif. Conversely, a cliffhanging cynic (me) catches sunsets south of Monterey Bay, faraway on the opposite coast. Photo by Josh Stewart taken in Florida.

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A beautiful view of seagulls flying in the sunrise sky framing a golden sea. It's a spiritual experience gazing at them, decoding their cryptic sunrise poetry! Love how animated your words feel, capturing the energy and swirling activity out there. Clicked on the thumbnail and that's such a stunning view! That sunset looks ethereal too.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

So much to love about your review! Thank you so much for appreciating all the things I also enjoy! (.. read more



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I like the use of words that are uncommon in poetry. This paints images of the end of summer for me. The end of a lazy day with plenty of life in it.

Posted 15 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

14 Hours Ago

Lots of people, as you know from your own love of complex words, make comments about my use of uncom.. read more
i just love your language and style of your poetry. Each word by itself is a a feast for the mind, which is built up into delightful phrases and lines, then verses and the whole poem and the effect is amazing whether I like the topic of your poem or not. I feel this way after every one of your poems I have read and it seems to me that it is a very unique style. I was just wondering if this is something that comes naturally to you, or if it is something you have consciously developed?


Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Days Ago

Your review is precious to me becuz who could imagine a better compliment? In my life & my mind, I'm.. read more
I really enjoyed the line keow Meo keow hahaha... An inspiration from that to create a poety or something out of livingbeings sound.
Good work

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Days Ago

I stole those sound word from Pete & rearranged a little, but all the credit goes to my poet-friend... read more
ArundassTP

4 Days Ago

Good work. Once I was behind birds and animals with a voice recorder in my mobile. I tried to record.. read more
barleygirl

4 Days Ago

Have you ever touched bases with Rob Trakofler (Bad Bunny) here at the cafe? He does the kinds of im.. read more
Some glorious scenery in those pictures, Margie, and your words have added a new dimension all of their own in alliterated creativity. I find seagulls quite annoying, though. We humans have pampered them with food to the point they have become food thieves by nature, and many aloof diners have become unwitting victims of lunch theft! I enjoyed your creative addition to these stunning photos. :))

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Haven't spent much time at beaches myself, which might be prime seagull pilfering becuz of the touri.. read more
An incredible movement start to finish in this poem.. have read it three times, pausing not only at end of each line.. seems to work well each time as if the haphazard movement of those birds. This really is a special write from you.. more of surroundings than emotions yet.. you've raised those too, Margie cos even over here I felt what you saw/see and intended. Love it and will go read Pete's poem now.. Two treats for the price of one.. a wonderful start to Saturday, 16.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

5 Days Ago

Yes, please do write more about your surroundings so we can share with you, if only a little. I li.. read more
barleygirl

5 Days Ago

I still remember the photo you sent, looking out over the gorgeous land from your place . . .
emmajoy

5 Days Ago

To be honest, bought the house because of that view. It serves as a cure for 90% of my unwanted stuf.. read more
Two poets, one on the east coast, one on the west ,gazing at different forms of bird life at different times of the day....your amazing descriptions of these birds... the harbor, the sunset the alliteration and some kooky words make this a delight to read. If I could only think of even half of your clever words, I would be extremely pleased. GREAT! XO, B

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Believe me, this crusty old cranium does not "think up" any kind of words at all. I am heavily armed.. read more
Betty Hermelee

5 Days Ago

Whatever it is, you have a certain ability to do this research!!! And have it make sense! Hugs
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This is so peaceful and I wish I could be there to see the bobbing birds. The photo is beautiful and your words give it life.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Lately, I feel remiss for not doing more descriptive poetry about my beautiful area. I think I ran o.. read more
Patricia

5 Days Ago

Hey ya gotta do what gets you through this and writing is a positive way to do it. Hang in there Mar.. read more
I loved the life you voiced here... the ocean... my soul misses it so much. And Monterey... though it has been several years since flying back to California for a visit, I made sure to come there to breathe in that peace. What a world you live in! Thank you for sharing it with us!

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Days Ago

I love writing about my surroundings here . . . I'm so blessed! Thanks for swooping by for a bite of.. read more
i love it. you've packed so many fun observations into this deceptively compact piece. nature is jam-packed with amazing things if we'll stop and open our eyes. i like how you flipped it from the east coast to the west to show similarities yet take it in a different direction. couldn't help but think of that old song when i saw the title. you really know how to paint a scene with words and have an uncanny ability to make anything a playful romp. your word choices blast off with ecstasy. you also leave some wonderment and interpretation to the reader ... :)

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Days Ago

Thank you for the inspiration, more times than I tell you! Your fascination with & knowledge of Thor.. read more
just wrote you and was deleted thrice
you will have to imagine what I had said
This site is a pain

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barleygirl

6 Days Ago

Sorry its such a struggle. You can always use that as an excuse for not reviewing! But it is demoral.. read more
Dave Brown

6 Days Ago

Can't believe you got through
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