Dinner (senryu)

Dinner (senryu)

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Dinner (a senryu)


he awaits entree
she dashes away like salt
his spice of life, gone



erin-cilberto
2/28/15

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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A little pepper to heat things up, a little salt to add the extra sting when it's over.
A fine senryu Jacob

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Edie,
j.
And some people spend the rest of their lives chasing that spice no matter how bad it is for the heart! Excellent writing, my friend. Lydi**

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you for your visit and kind words, Lydi.
j.
Ah...Mrs. Dash...a decent spice...but salt? Good for melting ice in these parts. ;> }

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you for the smile, Ted,
j.
Short and not so sweet. It’s a vivid scene even with so few words. I’d rather have pepper anyway. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, R.E.--me too.
j.

and left him more hungry than ever, I presume... or is it rude to presume... I dunno but I do like this little gem, and more than just a bit too....

N.

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, Neville...
j.
Neville

8 Months Ago

......... pleasure N :)
A few salty tears can melt a man's heart..
Nutmeg can make a ripe persimmon taste
like sugar and spice. Pat


Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

i like your poetic response, Pat.
thank you,

j.
Patricia Wedel

8 Months Ago

You are welcome... poetic persuasions are embedded in my repertoire... of desire. Pat
damn .... i hate when that happens ... the spice of life a high price to pay at any restaurant :(
E.

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

ha ha, thanks, E.
j.
Change the menu, too much salt is bad for you. Great play on words Jacob.

Chris


Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, Chris.
j.
You really can make brevity stand on its head at times, j. and this is no exception!

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, em.
j.
lol fantastic play on words. yes too much salt is not good for you, I suggest a milder spice!

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, andrew,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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