Love:  ages 13 to adult

Love: ages 13 to adult

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Love: ages 13 to adult




etiquette's
bored game,
crude assembly
built of intolerant parts
hearts don't interlock
minds cease to mesh
pieces of love missing
from the set,
and now only one 
place setting

containing a harshly worded knife
that slashes a badly wounded entree
with proper angst.



erin-cilberto
6/21/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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Relationships are hard and require work. I think that as a child, you have illusions of romantic love and how it will be easy, breezy, and like the Disney movies. Then you grow into an adult and see how challenging it is for two different human beings to be compatible.

Love requires work, compromise, talks, and is often filled with fights, disagreements, lack of fulfillment, and annoyance.

I enjoyed the word play of how you transitioned into talking about an apparent board game, to making it a metaphor about a dinner table and food.
"pieces of love missing
from the set,
and now only one
place setting"

So creative. Loved the read!


Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Velvet...
Yes, we expect that movie kind of love...and too of.. read more
What a tale of progress... from age 13 to adult.. only thing is that is helps if the person also grows in emotional maturity as well, as many don't.. male or female.

And that can present a larger set of problems ..

Alisa

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

yes, that is so true...thank you for your insightful words, Alisa...
j.
Alisa Js

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome.. so nice to read your thoughts again..

Alisa

this is so relateable .. now I know why I felt I was being watched throughout my teens.... tis because I was.... well either that or we have so much in common and are so eerily similar..

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for sharing, Neville,
j.
You bring so many emotions into this wondrous, painful, awakening mix. And each word, each thought is so perfectly chosen to reflect how life and love often come at an awkward price. I can still feel that pain that lived back in those days alive in your lines.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, Owl...
j.
I smiled here Jacob. Put myself back to teenage years and remembered some of the young lads that had marked my card. All I can say is I remember well the lack of etiquette and their conversation. They improved with age.

Chris



Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.
Some twisted version of an incomplete Scrabble-type game. Seems all the essential letters are missing or faded to an unreadable condition. I suppose those 12 and under are the fortunate ones here. Good read, J.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your insightful words, R.E.
j.
Built of intolerant parts, hearts do not interlock... Nuff said. Angst is damn right proper in this one... I wonder if I can play, only twelve and a half, but I matured quickly... As always, your supreme control of syllabic wordplay is an inspiration... Bravo

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, Silente...
j.
Silente-Write

1 Month Ago

My pleasure
oh my such the cynic Mr. jacob! .. your speaker is splendid in candor and frustrations .. i love L4 ... gives me teen memories a jolt :) interesting title that absolutely hooked me ... but why 13?? (i wonder) ;) another keeper says i!
E.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

that is often the age when dating starts to be a thing...or when the awareness arises...
than.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ahhhhhhh :)
this is a magnificent poem of irony and angst.

the relationships suggested is that etiquette, or whatever society says, should be followed, but that's just a board game that's boring, and of "crude assembly", or poorly thought out relationships. in other words: how society tells us to relate to one another isn't working, and i agree.

parts, hearts, cease to mesh, pieces missing from the set. far from holistic. i think this poem says that society looks at things in this way: atomistic and lonely, but it doesn't look at the bigger picture, which is what really matters and the reason why so many of us are suffering.

danke schön for sharing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your insightful and detailed review, Mondaine,
j.
I see this puzzle
all that child's play
only once things hit the heart
one turns from a 13 year old to an adult !

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

nice poetic reply, Lingering....appreciate the words,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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