Position

Position

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


Position

 

 

 

his eyes stared vacantly

out a window of inconsiderate memory

one that flexed its convoluted muscle pane

 

i spoke gently to him

offered to move him for a closer look

his head tilted upward

 

i saw his response to my query

reflected in his determined gaze

he had forgotten who he was

 

and all views looked the same

no matter the distance

no matter how far from himself 

 

the glass had come.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/8/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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to watch someone fading before your very eyes is the toughest thing of all, very tender, thanks for sharing,

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, gram....appreciate your kind words,
j.
Apologies, I forgot to check the ratings box

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jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

no problem, Neville...the words written as feedback mean a heck of a lot more to me...i really don't.. read more
Neville

1 Month Ago


snap sir.. and you are welcome as always..

N.
This is so very moving Jacob ...if I had penned these words, I would be very pleased indeed...

N.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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"i see, said the blind man". certainly a matter of perspective. peering through the window of ourselves can be quite elusive, evasive and certainly revealing. throws open the sash of a visually expressive write. so much for windex ... :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

such a clever response, Pete...i think better than the poem itself...
thank you,
j.
I could feel the sadness and pain in your words Jacob.... we do our best to make sure they are comfortable and sometimes we succeed.... then sometimes all they want or can do is to fade into whatever it is they see.... my dad died of a heart failure, but I think he passed looking out his window for mom, together for more than 75 years...

your words have touched deeply Jacob, I hope they have helped you as well...

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

oh i hear ya, Curt...75 years is insane...my folks were married for 70...and he was looking out the .. read more
' I saw his response to my query - reflected in his determined gaze - he had forgotten who he was..'

As a friend once said, 'I wish I could have my mum back.. ' An empty shell which holds a lifetime of memories.. and yet, we all know if not understand, what is missing. Your words are incredibly sensitive, almost fragile in their telling, jacob. Sigh.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words, em...and your understanding.
j.
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

Your words inevitably point to emotional situations about life - people, in general. So, tis you wh.. read more
The true old saying, old age unfortunately does not come on its own, it brings a host of complaints for our poor worn out bodies to deal with. You reflect this so well , it’s so
sad when we can’t recall events.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

yes, a host of them...thank you, Katrina
j.
Katrina Mckeown

1 Month Ago

It was my pleasure.
like a Rubik's cube of the heart displaying the pain of someone gone.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, andrew,
j.
You have an amazing ability to say so much in so few words. It's very admirable.
This poem descends into tragedy, but does so gently, & I couldn't help but see my own personal reflection of the topic "in the glass" so to speak. Excellent poem.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Jennifer.
j.
This hits very close to home.

A beautiful,write.

A

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, A.---tough when it does hit there.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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