the tracks of my fears

the tracks of my fears

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


the tracks of my fears

 

 

 

trains arrive too early

poems step off to desolation

and a nearly empty station

themes all boarding on the last car

 

a Pullman pulling syllables

out of the luggage carrier above

where gods try to make out wording on 

tickets, 

to where?

 

and the story sitting next to me 

drones on and on

with no ending, just ellipses

 

the conductor asks for my pass

and i pass out from too much verbiage

 

and poems look out the window

as lines in the fields of bent wheat

and crooked corn

roll past in iambic pentameter

 

my suitcase is full of bad poems

i wonder if i should let them out

to mingle with the other passengers

 

if only i could keep them away 

from where the prose are sitting---

they've consumed too many commas

at the dining car.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/6/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


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the conductor asks for my pass
and i pass out from too much verbiage

Posted 39 Minutes Ago


This is what makes a genius. I lift my hat. I’ve always thought I’ve read the best of your poems but every time I come across a new one I feel shocked for real. Wishing to be like you and more. Thanks for always sharing

Posted 44 Minutes Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Minutes Ago

thank you for your very kind words, hayzed.
j.
Reminds me of the early morning rush on my city’s local train. Poems like people in various states of (un)dress jumping in and trying to reach their final station in a presentable state. Many of them forgetting their identity cards in a bid to catch the early train. Being compelled to step off at desolate points before they could find their themes or rhymes. A recipe for disaster. Perhaps, the premature journeys were the cause. Or perhaps the number of nightly poems has just shotup lately. In any case, the poems just wanted to get going. Regardless of the welcome received.

P.S. The prose in the VIP section sit overfed mostly. Too much pampering. stops them from being agile and animated. They’ll probably be thrown out by the conductor with all their baggage at the last stop. It’s good the poems stay away

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

a poem with no ticket, no identity...hitching a ride, but not reaching a destination...your reply is.. read more
Pestonjee

1 Week Ago

I enjoy unravellling my thoughts with your poetry sir. What I'm gaining from your poetry is perhaps .. read more
Trains have been used in literature both metaphorically and literally used for storytelling. Be it Agatha Christie, J.K. Rowling or George Eliot all have explored different aspects of railways. But this side of the tracks is so uniquely new and amusing. All thanks to you Jacob. Amazing!!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

ah, Murder on the Orient..they all did it.
maybe all the authors murdered the poem...or sever.. read more
Many amusing truths, here.
Being, basically, a minimalist, I often "pass out from too much verbiage."
The prose pros are definitely comma happy.
Also, "bad poems" often make pretty good prose.
Fascinating work, Mr. E.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy.
I guess we would both go down then...certain authors li.. read more
A very clever use of symbolism here. Writing can be frustrating at times, as can travel. Loved the last two verses. I must agree; prose can be really nasty drunks. Look at Hemingway.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you, John....ah yes, trains and Hemingway...
"Hills like White Elephants"
"and t.. read more
Speaking of punctuation in poetry, I've noticed Miss Dickinson loaded her plate and poems with it. I like the "Pullman pulling syllables", very witty, that. I wouldn't worry about your suitcase getting lost in the luggage car though. Your bags will easily be identified by the tags of metaphor. Great writing, as always. F.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

and she so randomly capitalized it was hard to tell if she meant anything by it...thank you for your.. read more
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MCS
well done jacob, your words brought to mind w.s. merwine's book the folding cliffs.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

W.S. Merwin is one of my favorite Beat Poets.
thank you for that comparison,
j.
MCS

1 Week Ago

he's mine as well.
Trains arrive too early. This would be mementos news in Britain, would definitely make the ten o'clock news. Was getting that excited the poem I had in my head has gone now. You've put me under pressure now, I usually amble up at half four for the four o'clock train, could this be the day the four o'clock arrives early. That would be a poem.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

I want to be there when it arrives, thank you, Paul...
j.
Paul Bell

1 Week Ago

It was taking social distancing to the limit, think that was what the announcer said as she informed.. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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