Untitled.

You are the pain,

I have learnt to endure,

My weakest temptation,

Awakening my hidden sensations,

Infesting my mind,

With drowning memories,

Tales of happily ever afters,

Interlocking dreams,

Destiny,

Disaster?

On the inside I am slowly weeping,

But on the outside,

I pose,

Carved on my face,

A smile of determination,

Encorcelled eyes, consumed lust,

Nothing,

But,

Illusions.

Reviews

[W R Stowe]

Perhaps you should title this feeling's from within reminds me of the song tears of a clown well presented emotions I see

[Matching Socks]

Nice work again Kiera. :)

[?]

i loved this poem a lot. this is really good and i am going to read more. i also really loved that there's no title, i don't know if that was because you couldn't come up with one or you felt that that was the appropriate thing to do but honestly i think not titling this poem was the best thing to do. without the title it makes you think even more. i loved it and you should know your writing is great. thank you very very much for sharing this with all of us.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like this. This reminds me of something I have been through before. We all have had one person in our life that has brought us so much happiness then within a blink of an eye, they're running away. You become determined to win them back even though they have moved on. You act like you're fine and that it doesn't bother you, but deep inside it's slowly and sharply killing you. I can see that this is untitled. Are you wanting some suggestions for a possible title? Maybe something like "Happily Never After" or "Catching an Illusion"? You don't even have to use those titles for anything, they're just a suggestion if you're struggling for a title. The titles are one of the most important and hardest part of creating a piece. But excellent job.

[Mirra]

Sometimes what we show to people are not the true feelings we have inside. A very nice poem :-)

[FireFox9]

Very good but it needs a proper title. Fox-

[Bluefire]

"Nothing,
But,
Illusions."
Quite chilling, that last line.
This made me imagine the world you painted in a shade of gray, which is odd because there's obviously color to the words. ^^
Anywho, well done.

[Riley Bray]

Your poems are so beautiful honestly I'm jealous haha.

Favorite lines:

"Destiny.
Disaster?"

"Nothing,
But,
Illusions."

[Frontier]

There is usually a duality in emotions...

[Bright Ocean Star]

What is encorcelled eyes? Never heard of that before.... and the neon doesn't really go too well with the meaning behind this poem. Neon green is a harsh attention getter, like you'd see in a cheap, sleazy bar over an old cigarette machine or a pool hall. I think it's a good idea to change the color of the font, but try to find a color that fits the mood of the piece.

[Kiera Scanlon]

Mis-spelling, ensorcelled, as in "enchanted eyes", yes, I was young when I had written this, I had been meaning to change it for quite some time now! Thanks so much for the review!